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AnonymousAnonymous2 months ago

Wow 😲.. sounds so delightful 🙂

Fabulous.. I love it 🤩❤️

Rob_RoyaleRob_Royale2 months ago

A very good effort for a first story. Nice job.

AnonymousAnonymous2 months ago

Sounds very much like my wife. Men turned her out & made her a hot whore.

lovecraft68lovecraft682 months ago

Solid first effort. There's something to be said for a simple set up and delivery, not everything has to be an opus with a deep meaning. Old lovers reconnecting through "business" is a fun trope.

CalebZhassCalebZhass2 months ago

Happy to see your work getting through at last. Nice one too.

geronimo_applebygeronimo_applebyabout 2 months ago

Maybe look at 'show, not tell.' Look at the length of speech tags (afterdialogue).

Good start. Keep writing. :D

AnonymousAnonymousabout 2 months ago

Spoken punctuation goes inside the speech marks, not outside. You're inconsistent with that, which is why I noticed. It's easy to get right, and saves you from grammar nazis later on.

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Writer, experimenting with erotica. Trying to put together a full novel. Mid thirties. Male. Hetero. PM if you’re interested in talking writing. Series: Peta/Sam - read it here: https://www.literotica.com/series/se/peta-sam