All Comments on 'Porn Shoot with My Sister'

Seriously HAWT story! Although, I would suggest putting a bit more of "rape" in it. Maybe a bit of nipple bitting and boob whipping? That would make a A LOT more perfect, overall, SEXY story!!!

Excellent story, good build up rather than instant bonking from para 2, Just wish I had blonde sister LOL

What a wonderful love story. Way out there and ahead of the tiny little errors but then I prefer to read for the story

Your story construction is great, warm and exciting. A clear five stars and real talent You let it down, a little bit, with quite a number of avoidable typos. It clearly was spell checked but you have to read thru for sense too and that includes knowing how to spell so you can separate to from too and there from their from they're for example.

"This is the best sex the two of you will ever have." Steve declared... And your story about it is a good as they come.

I gave it a five only because there is nothing higher. I'll be reading more of your stories!

This is more than just the other stories. you should get published for your incredible story writing alone made me cum extra hard

I loved the story line! it was well written and the tempo was just right! I somehow think there may be some truth to this story, but I can't prove that, but still loved how it all came about for everyone involved. Thanks Again.

Amazing story! The pacing and plot development created a sense of realism for the characters that caught and held my interest throughout. Very well done effort. Thank you for writing and sharing!!

Your characters were well described and very believable. The plot was somewhat far-fetched, but it progressed quite logically, given the situation and the characters involved. Yes, there were some spelling errors and such, but the story was good enough for me to completely ignore them (which I almost never do).

As an unrequited sister-lover myself, I truly enjoyed the incestuous brother-sister love and lust between Andy & Alicia and between Steve & Mary.

I just read this for the second time, and enjoyed it a lot! When I chose the title to read, I didn't know that I had already read it. So my only criticism might be that the title is not as descriptive of the great story as it might be.

I've been reading stories here on Literotica for a few years now, and am very happy to find those like this that are paced well, written well, and have a unique story. Kudos.

I am no writer but your story read very well to me not just as a thought but as maybe a real act! Good job!

Me and my sister have been in a relationship for a few years now and we both thoroughly enjoyed this story. She's the younger one, but she was the one to seduce me, so I was still very much in the position that Andy was. It was fantastically well written, and I think it's one of the best stories on Literotica. I especially loved the tender moments. It reminds us of our relationship, that even though we're brother and sister, we're lovers more than anything else.

Really good story with few typo/grammar glitches. I look forward to reading more of your offerings.

The story was quite good. One of the best brother/sister ones that I have read. I didn't rate this one for all five stars...The reasoning would be the few grammatical and spelling errors along the way.

This was written very well. Loved the slow tease into it. But, to me, it was kind of expected that Steve & Marie would be brother and sister. Other then that, it was a great read. Keep on writing

Judging by the rating I suppose others felt it's a good story. Personally, I felt it to be a bit too weird for me mate. It was okay going in but I gave up reading after page 4. Alicia's dialogue with Andy on page 4 was a little demeaning in my opinion, and he just followed along like a puppy. That killed it for me mate, I am sorry. It seemed like Alicia cared less about her brother and more about putting on a show for Steve and Mary, money being her primary motivation and feelings much lower down the scale, if at all. And frankly, all that whimpering and begging from Andy was emasculating. It seemed like he had no will of his own, just going along with whatever his sister wanted. He also really does come off as an idiot(or rather mentally challenged), as he's so often fond of saying through the story.

Also, there are all those frequent little typos which is really very distracting. I am not saying this to be an arsehole mate, but it does get a tad tiresome to find an unknown word pop up mid-sentence, then to have to backtrack and try to decipher the supposed meaning of that sentence.

Anyhow, gave it a 3 and that's my honest opinion for what I read. Cheers.

Fantastic job. That might be my favorite of your stories I have read so far. You mentioned on one of your other story prefaces of a foot fetish that you behold. In recent months I have started to develop one of my own. I love the way you incorporate just a little of yourself into your stories. I not only enjoy reading them but feel like I am getting to know you while doing so. I bet you have pretty feet. Thanks for the good work.

Very nice. The story line itself was exceptional, a believable reason for someone to overcome a reluctance to break strong societal taboo. I personally enjoy reluctance stories, when an individual is persuaded to do something they don't feel they ever would and are then carried away with passion for the act. Must admit some of the typos are distracting but as I said the story line is exceptional. Your writing except for typos is excellent, the story flowed smoothly it is never necessary to stretch the imagination to believe in the possibility of the actions actually happening. Again thank you for sharing your imagination with us.

I really liked this story. Plausible reason for loving children to do something extraordinary for their mother. Like others who have commented here, I appreciate reluctance in such stories and brother exhibited appropriate reluctance. Sister trapped him into admitting his desire for her by his own physical evidence, even though his words denied it. The sex was descriptive and visually enticing. Steve and Mary appreciated the young couple's beauty and their participation was a nice touch. One missing word threw me for a moment: On page 4 brother is checking out Mary, and is brought upright by Steve. Mary says don't worry about it because "the day i care about a young stud half my age checking me out is a sad day indeed." Please correct that line to say, as I believe you intend, "the day I DON'T care..."

Would like to see what happened with Alicia and her mother.

not usally a brother sister story reader but that was hot as hell maybe cum out with more maybe getting mom in on the loving too awesome writing keep it up

Great plot, great story, well told. Hot! I can see this as a part one, but it's a great standalone as well.

My only whine is the spelling. There are a lot of 'spellcheck' errors. Two, too, to and their evil siblings. It really does take away from the flow of reading.

Did I mention this story was hot as hell???

Loved this, very exotic and I liked the story line. The only issue I have is that it was too short. I'd have liked a second session after a rest beak, maybe with them swaping partners. Plus, a final section of Alicia and Andrew watching the film back and 'reminiscing' whilst watching, would a been an ideal ending, for me anyway. But overall, it was a very good story and I really did enjoy reading it: Thanks !

enter this in a contest (dont care if the theme is irrelevant) and it would be first all day

Great story but you should probably get someone to edit your work :)

No I don't think there mom should get involved. ... I do think that maybe she should get pregnant and then they have to tell mom all about it and they are in love now want to be together openly with their moms consent. ....and mom ends up being cool with it as long as they are both happy. ....maybe mom starts to see little differences and ask questions about who's the reason for the changes in each of her children's lives because they aren't dating anyone.

Great story. It had me really hot by the end. A lot of raw sex, but an inthralling story to go along with the sex.

good story, would love a sequel. my only issue is when Steve cums on Mary's face she's wearing the mask. minor detail but its the little details that make a good story great

I thought Mary would ask Andrew for insemination

Just started reading the first chapter but it makes no sense, um, what fucking mortgage? Family had lived there over fifty years! The damn thing is paid for twice over easy, hell back then a fifteen year mortgage was fairly normal, none of this thirty year crap. They should only have taxes, water, electric and sewer. ...and hell, you can skate by without electric if you have to! Huge plothole ;)

Im sure I'll enjoy the rest of the chapters as I read them, but I've gotta get it out of my system... Why, oh why, do so many writers in this section ALWAYS write the male character in as a whiny, loser pussy whipped bitch. I've NEVER met a guy that had a hot sister that bitched about her walking around the house half naked and the ones that are willing to talk about it would happily bang the crap out of said sister if she was interested (if they weren't already). The other half of the writers act like brothers don't hug and kiss their sisters, well guess what, we do. All the damned time. Doesn't necessarily mean were fucking them (but doesn't mean we wont!;). Hell, I wish I had five or six hot sisters and a few step sisters to boot!

...there, now that Ive ranted lemme get back to the story ;)

Absolutely great, loved it all the way through.

And do not listen to that other stupid Anon, he's obviously never heard of a home equity loan or re-mortgaging a house when in debt or for renovations (such as redoing two child bedroom into adult bedrooms complete with an adjoining bathroom.

@anon our house was in the family for generations. Still ended up losing it when i was a kid. It can happen

Taken in full content, albeit with a flowing, somewhat suspenseful but endearing theme and context, the story is an ingenuous and unique blood-kin incestual, heterosexual story of a sister Alicia and her two-year younger brother Andy. They are in desperate need of funds to save the family home of their mother from loss of foreclosure. Though the home has been in the family many decades, with a mortgage (which could have been taken for many unforeseen and/or emergency needs). They answer a newspaper ad for a sibling couple. They are interviewed, meet all the requirements and are--because they had never had incestual relations with each other--accepted to undertake the mission and intent of their mentor's wishes and their request for advertising.

They are charged by their mentors Steve and Mary (who later admit they are long time brother and sister incestual lovers and are now legally married husband and wife) with comitting, on video/CD, their--Alicia and Andy's--first sister and brother sexual union and fucking trial from the initial foreplay up to and including brother Andy's cock penetration (and presumably ejaculation) into his sister Alicia's pussy! They perform immaculately from beginning to the very en...oops! Andy did not consummate to the 'very end' of the final stage of cock to pussy ejaculation!!! He pulled out and unloaded on his sister's body, and a small amount on their female mentor Mary. No homerun! Out at homeplate!! Inning over!!! Game over!!!

Though Alicia and Andy later discussed now being in a comitted "forever" relationship, being deeply in love, they never--as it was NOT detailed throughout the story's ending--consummated their union or unity, the unloading of Andy's babymaking sperm deep into his sister Alicia's vaginal cavities--as an entity of a 'complete' sexual relationship. The last six or eight paragraphs are confusing, questionable and much gobble-dee-goop of head-scratching unknowns and what-ifs!! Nothing is firmed up about their future, or the inclusion of their mother into their love affair, or the ultimate and TOTAL completion of Andy's fucking ejacualtion into his sister's pussy, and/or whether they "got married" and if Alicia ever got pregnant and having children!!.

It was an amazing story to be sure. The only thing wrong with it was some words that had a letter or two missing from it and pulled me out of the flow for a second. Otherwise, extremely well done.

Another amazing story from a truly gifted author. I'm a sucker for happy endings--where brother and sister find a way to overcome all the obstacles and find true happiness together.

Writing any story isn't easy and this one was well written with a thoughtful well composed story line. I found it's realism very erotic.

You definitely should write more bro/sis...

Other than being long winded and obtuse...you are the quintessential bore. How to say this,,,hmmm, lets see, oh yes. I have it know.

Shut the hell up you TROLL.

The story was done well. You might think about a follow up.

Very hot story, liked the teasing and it was extremely sexy.

But -and that's a problem many incest stories have- it's really getting old that the guy is the one who makes all this a bigger problem than it is while the girl is there begging him to fuck her. And seriously: If he is checking out his sister and getting hard doing it, then masturbates with her in the shower (and gets a bit frustrated because he can't fuck her), and later has great sex with her ... it's a bit ridiculous if the guy still acts as if he doesn't want to or has so huge moral difficulties with it that he wants to stop it. Of course he wants more sex with her, crossing the line is hardest the first time, afterwards it is far easier to justify it for yourself and there's no point to not admitting that he wants to do her. Just makes him look like an idiot, not like a responsible brother.

The best brother/sister story I have read! The premis was outstanding, the sex is smoking hot, and I really love the genuine affection they have for each other. Well done!

I love stories where there is quite a bit of development in them. and this is brilliantly done.

I thought it was going to be cheap and easy because of the name. But it was amazing, one of the best I've read online, around Top 5 ever for me, only thing I didn't like it's that it's too short. I would have loved to hear their escapades continue.

A good solid story, but several typos and grammatical errors interrupted the story flow. Overall, I did enjoy this one.

Damn, That was hot. One of the best stories I have read

Would have rated this hot story a 5 but there were way too many errors. Really could use editing. Wrong words, missing words, punctuation issues, missing letters, ...

Just a few examples, "lip" for "slip", "ma" for "man", "bean" for "began", and "ad" for "and".

Iv read alot of your storys and i think your good keep writing

See title comment. No smart-ass remarks, no smart-asses

I usually never comment on stories. This is the first. The truest forms of incest are never about sex. It's about intimacy and acceptance. It's purely about love and trust in it's rawest form. Your story captures that beautifully. Anyone can fetish over raunchy taboo. Only a true romantic understands those deepest needs. You truly understand.

I loved this story you.did an amazing job. The way it was descriptive but teasing at the same time. And how it was more than just sex but the love connection they found. There is just one thing about this story that I didnt like, that it ended. Will there be a continuation to the story? I would sure love to read it. Amazing job that you did.

I've read a lot of stories from various writers on literotica but this my friend would have to be one of the best. Thank you for a great read. 5 stars easily

Still just as good on second reading :)

Please keep up the great work...

Superb! Thank you!

Awesome as always, LC68. Loved it. Would like to hear more about Alicia and her Mom, though.

its best brother-sister story i read till now...and i read them a lot... great narration and bacground not just horny boy fuck his sister but real masterpiece

Well written,entertaining story. One of the best I've read!

PLEASE continue this story

I absolutely loved this piece it was well written and also left me happily annoyed that it was not longer or had any other chapters.

Great story please add there future in another chapter

Definitely one of the best brother-sister stories I've read. Could use some editing for punctuation and spelling (thing instead of thong etc.) but the story was very erotic. I loved the slow build and hesitation between Alicia and Andrew.

You truly are a gifted writer.

WOW! Super hot!

Nothing to add. 5 stars. The story doesn't need to continue. It's perfect as it is.

Thank you.

I'm left with a lack of words. This was a wonderful story. If you're ever going to continue this, I hope you will bring Steve and Mary inn and make them become friends and help Andy and Alicia achieve a relationship as true as they have.

...I was not fond of steve and mary holding all the cards with their deal. Andrew and alicia have revealed their identity through birth certificates, had them fucking each other on film all so that steve and mary can have insurance that andrew and alicia wont try to expose them. The siblings have ABSOLUTELY NOTHING that they can use to identify them even if they wanted to, yet are at the mercy of steve and mary because they could always expose them if they wanted to. What should have been done was for the siblings to know the business names of the two and what their influential positions are. THAT would be cause for steve's insurance policy. Because right now, it's completely one sided and i wasnt happy about that.

Who cares who has what over whatever,

It's a story, wish I had a sister like her.

Great story, worth reading.

I've read some of your other stories; but, I think this is my favorite. I would love to hear of them in 25 year, happily together and with teens of their own who perhaps carry on the family tradition.

Not a Lit Critic but from a Readers viewpoint, BRAVO. :)))

The one part of the story that really turned me off was the position that Alicia and Andrew put themselves in. Dangerous in too many ways and not enough precautions taken.

I could understand the lack of precautions for most of it (young and desperate), but they should have insisted the other two appear in the video mask less and they shouldn't have let the video out of their sight until they had a known complete copy. Or insisted video was a deal breaker, but that means you'd have to control the location so you knew no secret video was taken.

Incest is illegal. You're on video committing a crime. They may or may not be identifiable by voice. If they release the video by intent or accident you're very likely to go to jail and they aren't. You can't use it for blackmail since you're committing a crime on it. With everyone complicit and identifiable, the video can't be used against each other.

Needs another chapter PLEASE !!!!

Once again you have written an outstanding story, encompassing all that we look for in this theme. Better yet, you doubled down with the revelation about Steve and Mary. Simply brilliant!

Given my penchant for looking at the down side of things, I had images of Alicia and Andrew making the video, being ripped off for the money, and the video being sold on the open porn market. I like your solution a LOT better.

I'm looking forward to your newest, "My Mother, My First". Even if it won't be the result of a challenge I'm sure it will also be great.

That story was amazing ! I just know it will convince all the brothers and sisters out here with convictions to throw caution to the wind and just fuck each others brains out and become lovers. I wish I'd had a sister like that when I was growing up !!!!

That was one of the most amazingly well written stories I have ever read. I can't wait to read more of your stories.

When the first sentence has a grammatical error, I have trouble proceeding.

"I sat there staring at the framed photo of dad and I at my high school graduation... "

Should be "dad and me." If you aren't sure about which to use, just take the other person out of the sentence and it becomes clear. You would never say "... a framed photo of I," so it's obviously "me". And then there's just sloppy errors like this: "... Alicia untied her robe and let HER fall..."

To Anonymous with the "SO" comment ...

First, if you had any balls, you would not be Antonymous

Second, your dismissal of the story for grammatical errors ..Total Bull Shit

Third, these stories are written by amateurs, not fucking Hemingway ..

GetALife.. AssWipe!

Yeh a few grammatical errors... So what. I just enjoy the story. If I could write like this I would, until then... I'll read your stories everytime they're posted.

Not for nothing but SO what a few errors

I read the stories for the content and the sex Duh

Too many people want to pick apart stuff and degrade others efforts

I can't write like this But You can So please keep on writing the Story was awesome the sex was erotic and Damn hot

Had me hard pretty fast That's why I read this stuff

So Thank you

Cs

I !iked the story line,did not know what to expect. You went down an interesting path. Enjoyed the piece.

Really incest and hot sex at its best.

I love incest stories(brother/sister and mother and son) and you deliver with them every time. All of your stories are excellent. I would like you to add more brother sister stories.

Five Stars!

I read this story some time ago. When I started to read it I remembered reading it before but kept reading. It is a beautiful sexy story with plenty of true love by both the Brothers and Sisters. I enjoyed the story just as much the second time around as the first time I read it.

I am gradually reading all your stories and as yet have not read one I haven't enjoyed. I also like the slow built up which gives a lot more meaning and enjoyment in the lead up of the actual sex taking place in the way you tell the story.

fantastic

I like how they're both hot (specially the sister), and that she's the one that starts the sex and actively wants it. Also I can't get enough of that dirty talking, specially if it's about a blowjob, Keep it up, 5 stars without a doubt,

Well done, very sexy

The build-up, the story, and the ending was perfect. The "little surprise" at the end made the story one of the best. I hope I wasn't the only one to put two and two together.

Very hot!!!

Loved this story. I found it looking for a short stroke story, but quickly loved the characters. Great wrap up too. A fast favorite for me !

Thank you for a wonderful brother/sister story! I love that they began falling "in" love towards the end of the story. The characters were wonderful and the piece itself was great! I loved the interaction with "Steve" & "Mary" towards the end.

Now for the criticism: your editor sucks. There were three or four times in a row that thong was spelled "thing", distracting. Spelling in general, punctuation, etc. Again, all of these are minor in the scheme of things.

Thank you again for a wonderfully written brother/sister story! JJMemaw

About as good as it gets. Great story lets have more.

Damn hot read, more please

Well written. I would love to watch a brother and sister make love.

A loving couple. What a great story!

Well written. It made me wish it could watch a brother and sister making love now.

I would love a second part.

I think we need another chapter to this story.

This story was absolutely amazing!! Great job

An excellent story! Well thought out and nicely balanced between honest emotions and vividly depicted steamy love scenes. Thank you!

One of the best stories I've enjoyed at literotica! (Lovecraft68 wrote two others in my top ten,too!)

Great story - I'd love to have a follow up

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