All Comments on 'Princess Becomes the Toy of Monster'

Your prose could use a lot more practice: the progression is choppy and reads more matter-of-fact than you probably intended, which undercuts the sensuality. There are also several plot holes and headscratchers: why not ride double on the horse; why is the drake hoarding food they don't eat; why would a quadruped have humanoid genitals.

That said, the basic idea has promise. Fantasy aside, Sofie is charmingly earnest, and a virgin princess with a fetish for draconic ravishment is brilliant fodder for a proper satire. Come back to this once you've honed your writing: I'd be interested to see how she handles the fallout of her bestial tryst.

You should make a story out of this. I for 1 want to see what happens to sofie and her child.