All Comments on 'Queedom's Corruption Ch. 01'

This was difficult to read, with the perspective constantly switching between characters. It also didn't help that the either character was referred to as "you". It would be easier to follow if you referred to the character's by their name or what they are. As for rapidly switching views, it would be better if it was done between chapters instead of pairs of paragraphs. Other than that, great story.

Warning at the start really helped with the reading. Knowing this was an RP allowed me to read this more like a conversation.

I really like where this going! I hope our precious princess finds the power she seeks.