by amandrake
Sex? Sure. Erotic? Not a bit. It's all so matter-of-fact. No buildup to anything.
And the spelling and typos ---- SOOOOOOO DISTRACTING -- even though there wasn't much to be distracted from. Check out Peter_ for how a tease/denial story should be written.
Just as I would object to in a male dom story, the lack of proper discussion is troubling. Limits? Safeword? First outing and he's shared with two others. That's certainly trust building. Rachel may be seen as establishing her power here, but a selfish master or mistress isn't pleasing to me. There needs to be more in it for the sub than the trite I live to serve trope. Its human nature. She has potential, if you don't ruin her by sending her into psycho bitch territory.
I fail to see where the man gets any benefit at all with crap like this. All femdoms do are reverse what they complain about. Guys who fall for this shit must have their balls chopped off as well as getting caged.
Because the cage is a joke that he removed the second she turned her back. Didn't need no stinking keys either. Always have to laugh at stories that suggest a guy would remain locked in a cage any longer than HE wanted to. She has no control. He has it all. Dump the manipulative bitch, regain some pride and self respect and find a woman that might actually love and respect you and not want to use you as a toy for her own self gratification. What a cunt. What a bad job of story telling.
1 star.
Love for a lady to do that to me :)....
Not sick pleasure in a different sence....
Enjoying it but.... More time needs to be spent establishing a deeper sub dom relationship before sharing around which implying a general slave.. So moving a bit quick but still looking forward to chapter 3.. Thanks
My only concern is that my style may be to similar to yours. I am curious to see the workings of a mind that works so similarly.
I have loved both chapters so far and I cannot wait for ch 3.
Rachel may be taking charge, but she's moving forward too quickly and too selfishly. She's like so many dominant women--Take good care of me while I treat you like shit. Any kind of lasting relationship requires give and take--yes, even when the woman is in charge. Rachel will push too hard and too fast and eventually he will question whether or not the whole thing is worth it. Then he'll split.
I loved both of the Rachel stories, probably equal with the two stories starring Becky. I really hope you write more stories with dominant females and submissive males. Thank you.
This is an incredible story! Very erotic. Please write more chapters for this wonderful story.
The story was great. However, it ended too soon. There just have to be more chapters.
Anyway, I would love to be Rebecca's boyfriend. How does one find a girl like that?
this is a good story but I agree with the previous statements. there are so many other places that this relationship can go! Why not present (for example), a chapter where Rachel removes Sam's cage, makes him pleasure her and then fucks his brains to the point where he can't walk? Or force him into prostitution while making him go down on several women at once?
keep up the good work.
Not only boring chastityshit, but also gloryfication of prostitution. No thanks.👎
I agree we need (well at least want) a Ch 03!
But i don't have a lot of hope because it has been over seven years, although the author has written something a little over a year ago.
So fucking hot. I am in love with Rachel. Long to be controlled, humiliated, and denied while getting to love her with my obedience and tongue. To serve my goddess how ever she likes would be so fulfilling. Please please mistress take me and do with me what you like.