All Comments on 'Rainbow Harem Pt. 02: Rose'

I gave up half way through. In the English language that I've used all my life, they/them are 3rd person PLURAL pronouns. If two people are together, then "they" implies both of them. In your story, "they" means Moth. I got fed up with reading "they", my brain automatically interpreting that as meaning both of them, then realising it was code for "Moth" and re-interpreting the sentence. Having to do this several times per paragraph totally spoilt any enjoyment I might have had from the story.

It wasn't helped by Pt.02 appearing in First Time without any scene-setting, whereas Pt.01 was in BDSM. Better I think to have it all in one category, e.g. Transgender, or BDSM if most stories fit that category.