All Comments on 'Raped in the Park'

Cool and everything, but I'm just wondering why the heck I was naked in the park in the first place. Lol Poor decision making on my part, I guess.

Change of perspective from third to first? Gross.

More please

The concept is there and the story is there, however it felt a bit slow paced with the constant 3rd to 1st switch of perspectives. The story needs more focus on one perspective. Also there were a few areas that the emotional tells could have been shown instead told.

Another happy customer

I would like to know our Victim a bit better. I want to know why and how she finds herself walking through the Park, naked at this particular moment in time. I also would have enjoyed hearing out Victim's thoughts as things escalated.

None of this should be seen as a Complaint, but rather wishes on my part. Please keep writing and I hope to read more from you soon. Keep Smiling... Cheers...