All Comments on 'Realtor Revenge Pt. 09.1'

Good story. Over the top sex, and grotesque details about poor Janis, and I'm really sorry that she's dead, unless Flanagan is one hell of a tricky bastard and knows computers better than I do! Well, I'll miss Janis, but luckily, this all fiction! Five stars, ~~ JB

it's disappointing that she thinks Mark loves Janis or anyone for that matter. All Mark cares for is more money and power. Maybe she could take some solace if she knew how Mark only used Janis as a whore. Pimping her out in ways far more depraved and brutal than Craven will ever have to endure, as he literally destroyed her both physically and psychologically. Hopefully Craven will survive long enough to Mark down.

Janet dead - finally, she deserves a peaceful rest

Mark to die - thank god, hope its brutal

Craven and the town to finally be free from from Mark and his crap - about time

Bring on 9.2 and let's end this!!!

I still like your style and turn of phrase! Keep it coming!

C

In "Realtor Revenge Pt. 06" you wrote this about Janis in the coffin:

... After securing both hands over her head ...

But here:

... I got a good view of her right hand and the chain that kept it secured to the side of the coffin....

And this idea is acceptable because Janis reported this in the last chapter of the first story:

... Shifting my butt to the side, my hands contacted my bare thighs ...

(very difficult if your hands are secured over your head ...)

But in all her "ghost appearances" her hands seem to be cuffed in front of her, as she can drive, almost choke ... and so on.

Perhaps you have to decide the cuffs positions ...

... even if I have to agree with an anonym's comment to your preceding chapter:

"... Verisimilitude is not just a word taught to English majors, and this story lacks any semblance of it."

It's a pity, because I like how you write ...