All Comments on 'Ren - Shades of Grey Ch. 13 Extended'

I knew this had to end eventually but not so soon. I know all of them deserved to be punished but I still love Ren. I was afraid Ren was going to be shot by Hawk or a cop while trying to protect Janey. I'm happy Adam came to his senses and is not so controlling anymore and he is starting slowly with Janey. I was really torn between Ren and Adam. And I really thought the Nicholas' father might be Jake but I'm happy with Brad being the father (just as long as it wasn't Hawks). I wish you would continue with Ren's story but I know you have other stories to continue and new ones to write. It would have been nice for Janey and Ren to actually sit down and tell each other how they really felt about each other without interruptions. Just to clear the air so to speak. You are a very talented writer and kept your fans hanging on till the very end. I will truly miss these characters. I've learned alot from the victims perspective (what happens afterwards). That is something you never see on tv or in books. Thanks for sharing all sides of the characters. Are you sure you don't want to continue with this story??? Hint Hint??? Pleaaase! :) I can't believe there will be no more Ren or Janey!

Trash. All this time for this crap. Ypur stories are permanently off my list...What Garbage! ZERO CLOSER!

I have loved your stories and followed them religiously but I am seriously upset with this ending. IT ties up no loose ends, we have no clue who she ends up with Brad, Ren, Adam?? I mean you say Adam is upset, but not that she is with him that Brad is the Daddy but of course no that she wants to go with him and you NEVER even mention Ren again I mean whats his reactions to all this? You show nothing of the rest of the family, you don't tell if Janey ever heals and to me I really REALLY wanted to know this!? I mean does she ever learn to say NO again? Also what about when everyone gets out? How does it end with Brad's women?? I just feel that his is NOT your best work and calling this an end is rather sad and lazy. I know its hard to write this since I AM SURE you have a life! But at the same time don't start so a wonderful and life like story to end it like this. It's a bit insulting.

plz plz just writ a lil lil more telln abot ren! Wt happnz after jail?????? Xoxo

But it is your story and you needed to tell it the way it came to you. I really loved Ren and so wanted Janey with him, wanted the baby to be his. I have to agree that you didn't really tie up the story at least not to my satisfaction. What happened to Ren? To Brads' girlfriend? Did Janey marry Adam? Did she stay with her parents? Who did she love or was the entire episode so awful that she loved none of them. Aw well, it is the end and I can make up my own ending to it. Thanks for sharing.

Thanks to my reader for their comments, good and bad.

I am currently working on a story line for Brad and Shantanaya ('Tanaya) to tell their story. Obviously Janey/Sky will make an appearance in the story line so you will get an update on her progress. Ren, well he is Brad's friend, so...... yeah, he'll be mentioned.

Thanks once again for your comments.

Mygypsy

I'm sad that this story is ending...but especially with the way it played out. It started very strong with Hawk getting killed and thought it showed some promise with her appealing the judicial system at the second meeting. I was ok with the idea that Brad was the father. I think it might have been interesting to see some rivalry between Brad and Ren throughout their prison stay over the baby and then see how things pan out upon their release. Anyway..thanks for the storyline. It was one of the best on here

well what can i say ur ending turn my all time fav series into an average story. this ending chapter is one of worst i have seen on literotica by far. if u didn't have time u should have left it incomplete instead of this trash ending. ren's pt. of view not shown at all even as story is named after him what an irony !!!

...I think, going by your author's note, you were anticipating something like the reaction you have gotten. I think that...(and please dont think of this as bitchy, because I have been an avid reader all the way through)...with a little more time and thought into it...you could have expanded on it. Hawk being shot...could have been tackled on par with the calm scene of Janey eating icecream...one section calm, Janey experienceing some normality, and then cut to Hawk, the last moments of his life. That would have possibly had more impact that just announcing his death. Although I would have loved Brad and Ren to have been released, I knew they did have to serve time for the reality that they did sit back and not help til later...and therefore (apart from the occasionally casual use of language from the Judge) their sentancing was good. Janey's quiet protests are realistic, she had no councilling by that point and would be naught but confused, frightened and most likely still unsure what to think considering her brother's opinion of Ren and Brad trying to "lure" her. And finally...the end...the 7 months later. I am glad that the baby is Brad's, because for it to be Ren would have just been too suggery sweet and unrealistic (lol although the romantic in me would have loved it! ha)But you have left a great deal of "ends" only loosly tied. I would say have a wee look through it, and expand on what you have; make it clearer, give a more final outlook on her life. Sometimes hindsight can help you. (Ive had to go back again and again more than once, and my poor friend Tricialen gets sent all these chapters and unerringly gives her opinion as a reader...perhaps there is someone like that you can send it to?) For the whole story (start to the chapter before this) Amazing. Harsh and brutal concept of reality, but enthralling and edge of seat sitting ALL the way. But this chapter, although it has the bullet points of a great chapter...was marginally missing the "cherry on top" status. Looking forward to the rest of your writing though Mygypsy, its nice to find a writer who doesnt conform and who can capture their readers to a story that quite rightly shocks.xxx

Well..... You did have lots of fans. Who cares about Brad and Tayna. This story was about Ren and Janey. It didn't even end really about them. You went totally off course with this one. I loved this story and waited for this next chapter everyday. You made lots of fans. This chapter was totally STUPID! I think you need to wipe this chapter off and do it again.

I couldn't wait to read the next chapter of your story as it evolved. This ending just doesn't compare to the rest of the chapters. Rethink your ending! I think you'll see enough response to agree.

No problem with them going to jail - they needed tp pay for what they did. No problem with Brad being the father - more drama than Ren. The problem with this ending chapter was it was unreadable - no idea how Janey got to where she is today - did she have any contact with Ren or did you suffer from Stockholm syndrome - where was Adam's role in this ending chapter - her brother seemed forgiving of Brad

Just disppointing when all you chapters beforehand were great. Oh well, I think you should rethink this ending but I know you are capable of writing a great story. Awaiting your next one. Thanks for taking the time to write for us your fans!

this is such a downer..especially after how the previous chapters have been like...please write something about ren! we at least need to know what happened to him! adam and janey so don't go well together...please give ren and janey another try!

I hated this ending. It made all the rest of the chapters worthless. I would have prefered Ren being shot saving Janey from Hawk.

In my opinion Adam is just another abuser. He took advantage of a woman that was too messed up to be in a relationship. Putting Janey with him was a mistake. He should have been taking care of her, not sexing her. I didn't find that to be romantic at all.

Sorry...I feel like I wasted my time waiting for this to end.

I never expected a fairy tale ending since this story is about reality.I think you concluded it the best you could . You showed us Adam is still controlling but Janey is determined to do this her way regarding her son.By making Brad the father , you are continuing Janey and Ren's story as well. I hope to see the start of Brad's story soon . Keep up the good work!

i still cant believe that brad is the father. i was certain it was hawk or ren

While the romantic in me woudl have liked Ren to be the dad and Janey to end up with him the realist in me is fine with how you ended the story. The way I see it Janey is very young and has a long way to go in her life. Just becuase she is with Adam now doesnt mean she will marry him. Mayeb in time and in later sequels her and ren will come across eash other agaig and connect on a level playing field. I have loved this story and you are a wonderful writer. I am looking forward to the next isntallment with Brad and I also hope you get back to the racer series!! Thanks so much!

problem here is, after horrible events a lot of people seem to like the criminals (including several main charactes). the so called Stockholm syndrome is still working on the young mother and she still completly out of normal judgement towards any male. Mygypsy might be a very good writer but he should change to horror stories, maybe there he would write something erotic in the end.

I so wanted Ren to be the father and definitly didnt want Hawk to be the father. But I can see were it needs to be Brad, the not HORRIBLE choice and not SUGARY SWEET choice.

I wonder who is his good friend he might want for a Godfather for his son that Janey mentioned?? Is this were Ren and Janey see each other again?? And discover they are still in love????? Well a romantic can only dream..................

I like most of your other readers was not happy with this ending. Since you introduced Brad I was a fan of his over Ren and especially over Adam. I never saw Janey ending up with Ren or Adam. Brad was always the nice guy. Under his tough guy exterior he always tried to make her feel better, tried to make her more comfortable and he actually showed her that she could enjoy sex. It is obvious Brad loves Janey though he is not in love with her. If Ren grows up while he is away then maybe him and Janey could be together. Then again I think if Brad has a brother. . .

Good story but did not like the ending.

i so wanted ren to be the father that way they still had a chance together i know people will think no way cuz he raped her but he had feelings for her at the end of the day. the choice is weird its realistic and sweet what i didnt expect brad to be the father. this just shows that theres not going to be janey and ren know i think they went good together even with the circumstances. i dont think she well ever lovve, love adam and she needs to grow up and move on realisins that she dosent have the right feelings for him that are needed ina reliationship. i just wanted a fairytale ending so bad :(

I was okay that Ren wasn't the father and was happy Hawk wan't the father. What really got me was Janey staying with Adam in the end. My next question is what happen to Ren? But, thanks for writing the story I love all three series.

Ok...until this so called end of the story, I really liked it. But nothing was resolved really. I was okay with Ren not being the father, but just to cut the story off with no real explanation of anything that happened after she introduced the baby was not very good writing. I think you could probably stand to add another chapter.

After reading the final chapter I felt sick because I think it's so bad and had many questions:

Where's Ren in this chapter (besides in front of the judge he is missing), why seems Janey so brainwashed and weak all of a sudden and why is Adam the softie hero when only a chapter ago Janey loved Ren and detested having sex with Adam. She even wished to be somewhere else during sex with Adam but now she is all for him.

I feel like this chapter ruined the whole series especially Ren's character. He seems to be the big fat looser here and Janey seems to be weaker than she was ever before. I had wished for a strong Janey together with Ren who doesn't smother her like Adam does.

Adam as the big hero is a freaking joke, he is the one who had sex with a traumatized pregnant rape victim but no he wants to take it slow.

I hope you will write and publish an alternative end for Janey and Ren fans with a happy ending for the two of them and bring back the spark the last chapters had but this forced one is totally missing.

So sorry, Mygypsy, I love your stories and still think you're an awesome writer, but ... this chapter blows :( Yes, I know, it's your story and all, but the romantic in me was really rooting for Janey and Ren. I was really disappointed that she stayed with Adam and that Brad was the baby's father. I just so very much wanted a Janey and Ren ending ;;

The end doesn't go with the story...you have her in another abusive relationship with Adam...he's just a little tamer....but after pushing her in the last chapter he really shouldn't have gotten family approval to stay....She didn't have to stay with Ren...even alone would have worked...but you killed the whole story in this chapter for me....I wasn't always happy with the ways things went but they at least flowed...this seemed like a sell out...sorry to say:-(

I was disappointed by the ending. I felt sorry for Ren and really wanted him to wind up with Janey. It is obvious that they totally love each other and their separation cut them deep. Janey liked Adam but never loved him; same goes for Adam, so their separation would not be nearly as traumatic. Your ending was probably more realistic, but I was looking for the "fairy tale ending". Please do a followup chapter for us Ren fans, perhaps where he is pardoned or appeals his case and wins, and winds up with Janey!!!

I tink u did a brillant job wiv the ending! Im glad she didnt end up wiv ren! people 4get dat she is still n her teens! its not like she was goin 2 marry ren or adam! b4 she was kidnapped and raped she had no experience wiv serious realationships! she needs time 2 get over it i tink she needs time away frm both! She needs 2 grow n2 herself ! she didnt even hv a date wiv adam until da last chapter! i so luv da way u left it open 4 ren 2 come bk n2 da story! brads his bstfriend so she will c him again(godfather?) she needs time 2 mature and learn 2 b part of an equal adult realationship!

I like it immensily. I believe it went a differently then everyone was expecting, but i also believe there is more to come which will please the numerous fans. I loved it although the flow of the story was a little up and down along with Janey's feelings for Ren and Adam, which was a little of putting but i found that i loved it anyway.

I love your style of writting and will be waiting...for more.

but what about Ren???? please please please dont end it like that!!!! i love Ren so much! he's got to be in Janey's life! sequel...?

so brads the father...wow. like i could see it coming but then again not. i dunno....but i want ren back!!!!! you so have to write another story pertaining to this one and have ren come back or somthing...i dont like that shes not with ren....that blows i was thinking forever that she was going to be with him and shes not...grrr. oh by the way good chapter i liked it but i wished ren was in it more

Sorry, but the extended version still sucks because at the end Janey still seems like a different person. She is still weak and not the same that loved making love with Ren and hated it when Adam tried the same.

IMO the extended version is still not worthy for the end chapter of the series and especially for the end of Rens story because the reader still doesn't know what's going on with Ren.

In all the last chapters the story worked toward Ren and Janey being a couple at the end but the last chapter destroys everything you presented.

At least James sees that Adam is not right for Janey and I still hope that you will write an real alternative end with and an happy end for Janey and Ren for all your fans. Pretty please so I can look back with a good feeling when thinking of the series.

No no no no no. :( I hate Adam. I want Ren. Geez. :(

I think you did a good job fleshing out the story more. The 1st version it was almost like you didnt want to or couldnt fill out some of the scenes. SO you just told us the outcome. Thanks for the update!

Hopefully you keep adding to it! :0)

If Janey has that poor of taste, I guess she deserves him, but what a disappointing end to a very long story.

Although this was a very long story which I very much enjoyed I wish that the end could have been different. Sky... janey should have ended up with ren, Its a shame you didn't end it with them getting together after his release from jail - You kept me hooked all the way - good story.

I found the story utterly intruiging! It's one of the few stories here with a decent plot and substantial character development. Kudos to your effort. If you do add more parts of the other characters and whatnot, I'll be one of the first in line to read it! Keep writing!

-Mel

loved it kept me hooked was a little dissapointed ren wasnt the father and that he and sky didnt end up together ohwell guess not every story is a fairytale.

can you do an alternative ending with ren?

Beautiful story. I know it's been a while, but I think you should gather it all up into a novel and think about publishing it as a dark romance. I'm crying.

It was a fantastic story until you added this crap at the end. You wasted a lot of time with this addition to a chapter instead of finishing the story and tying up the loose ends. I hate stories that do not have an ending, it is why I more often than not read the last posted chapter first to see if the story is an orphan, as is to often the case on Literotica. I have been reading for quite a while and thought this was a really good one but not now.

I loved that you put the ending though I wish there was a bit more. I was still pulling for Ren, not as father but to be with her! Not Adam, he still seemed controlling. I loved the story though. It was wonderfully written and thank you for adding who the father was. At least it wasn't Hawk... :) I still remain a huge Ren fan though and in my head they get together lol.

I love this entire series!!! 5/5

Majorlly disappointed that Janey and Ren didn't end up together somehow. Adam is WAY to controlling and doesn't look after her like Ren did....Just sayingC481

Seriously? You had to end this as sadly as you did????? Normally I don't go for this rough but I kept in there hoping for some redemption somewhere.........this ending is only comparable to when CW cancelled Veronica Mars. Great writing though, I am envious..........still, really??????? Both Veronica Mars and Ren deserve better than this.......

Who gives a shit about whether your end your stupid story brief summary;

- bimbo who supposedly was raped gets aids cause she keeps giving it out

- author stops writing shit story and

- we all get to live happily ever after

Such a good story. Wow. I think about your stories more than any others I've read. Your stories are clearly provocative, enough for someone to write in anger and denying caring all at once. That's pretty effective writing! Thank you.

ren's a piece of shit, all of those biker assholes are pieces of shit. they allowed her to be raped and brutalized,adam may be controlling but in the end he truly has Jane's best interests at heart. especially seeing as how shes obviously too fucked up in the head by what happened to understand that she shouldn't be reminiscing about what ren and brad did to her but disgusted by their bullshit tenderness because their bullshit tenderness is a lie,call what hawk did to her what it was rape,it was despicable,but at least he was honest about it. ren and brad are nnothing but a pair of deluded monsters,and janeys a whore

Thanks for your story it was well worth the read. Life doesn't always hand out peaches. Not every story gets the happy ending. But when a story tackles reality and makes you stop and consider your own views and how the system does not always work, not every one will be happy. Good on you for sticking to your story!

This was NOT how this story was suppose to end!!

Ren & Brad were NOT suppose to go to jail! Ren was suppose to end up with Sky & it was suppose to be HIS baby!!!!

:'-( this was an amazing story, but I HATED the last chapters!!

Write more like this, the biker gang type, I loved it, but PLEASE let the two end up together!!

Congratulations on finishing. Firstly, I thought the baby was Hawk's since he raped her before the contraceptive was implanted by Brad. Janetta was a typical victim of abduction, the longer she stayed with them, the more time they had to effectively break her spirit and mind, and they could have broken her body (!). It's typical in abusive relationships for the abuser to inflict pain physically and emotionally, evoke worthlessness in the victim, and then on occasion to show a little kindness. With that said, the victim becomes solely dependent on their abuser all the while fearing them.

I am glad that she ended up with Adam, and James can go to Hell with his remark on how he isn't right for her. Who is he to say that when he isn't around them 24/7? In reality, the thought that Ren didn't do all he could have to help her initially upset Janetta (I don't know if some caught that or just chose to completely dismiss it), and I wish some readers would take into account that something profound like that won't ever go away. They all abused Janetta, period.

Fist she ended up with ADAM who was just as controlling as Hawk in his own arsehole way .Secondly she didn't even stand up for Ren in court regarding the willing sex she had with him .She almost deserved everything she got stupid woman.Please don't write a love story that has people invested in it and then blow it completely out the water .Like most here I'm sure I was only reading to see how her and Ren ended up .No stars here for this total wast of space ending.

People are so tied into the idea of this Ren guy being a "good" guy. Despite the author's claim that these characters are just characters and that no one was meant to be a hero, she clearly worked hard to skew her readers' thoughts in that direction even until the very end. She drew Ren as a hero.

Authors need to write about characters; they don't need to justify them. But Mygypsy clumsily attempts to justify Ren's appalling behavior both in her opening comments and in her story. Her victimized lead character regurgitates the author's apparent real-life mindset when she says, "I know who tried to help me. People turn a blind eye to [kidnapping, repeated rapes, beatings, and demeaning behavior] and worse in everyday society." And she says it "levelly" because she is convinced... and so is the author. This kind of justification of terrible behavior is what's wrong in our society. DO write about crappy stuff and DO get off on crappy stuff, but don't make the mistake of justifying it to yourself.

The judge was right on. These dudes - yes, even REN - weren't good guys. They aided and abetted MANY crimes, and then took advantage of a teenager whose mind had been royally fucked, on top of it all. (So maybe that makes them a little worse than the original perpetrators!) Not once, did they take advantage, but MANY times.

And Ren "comforted" Janey in the back of the van? Yeah... No. He raped her. He violated her. He helped to prevent her from returning to her family. He didn't comfort her. The only thing he did that wasn't super rapey was not leave any more bruises. Goody for him.

This is Non Con/Reluctance. How 'bout we not mistake it for a romance by romanticizing the rapists. Ren continued to get as much out of her as he could while she was defenseless and only returned her when he realized his tiny conscience couldn't take how ABSOLUTELY FUCKED UP she was. And all the way to the end, this Janey chick had no idea that she really was as screwed up in the brain compartment as she so vehemently denied she was.

Janey needed more counseling to come to terms with what really happened, or maybe she's just dumb as a box of rocks (as are all the other idiots who are sighing into their hot chocolate over that rapist Ren). This isn't romance. It's a commentary on how little it takes to satisfy some women's desperate need to be loved, even if it's by a rapist. As long as he only rapes in the name of "protecting" the little lady from that other guy - you know - the REALLY baddy bad guy who leaves marks on the outside and doesn't give her orgasms as he's forcing/coercing her to spread her thighs. Asswipes, all of them. They need to be in prison, and Janey needs a major overhaul of the mind.

Damn, this was a weak chapter/ending to a fairly well written saga. What the hell happened! Did someone else write this part?

The Judge seemed to be the only one with any common sense! Janey felt so bad for each of them because they were her 'friends'?

Ren only held her captive longer to 'give her time to heal mentally and physically; so she could go back with her head held high and not feel shame for what was done to her.' Whoa - I totally missed that scene whatsoever!

Brad gets to be part of his bio-kid's life because he showed Janey sex could be good? Uh, no, he showed his victim that rape can include pleasure even when it is not consented to.

Janey is a teenager and still thinks like one. Ren is not Colin Farrell, he was just one of her kidnappers and rapists. The character certainly seems to need a lot more counseling. At least Adam realized he was in love with a teenager and started approaching her accordingly.

The only character of worth seems to be her brother James.

So disappointing. It was like you were trying to meet up to everyone's expectations all at once.

Adam is the same as the others.

he is controlling and not right for her :(

Mygypsy don't you dare let her marry Adam he is so busy trying to win her parents and Robby over to help him get her and he is soooooo wrong for her!!! She is in love with Ren!

What a story! Please please please find a way for Ren and Janey to come together even if it is only thru their guest appearances in Brad 's story. It is heartwarming to feel the pain of their longing for each other. Thanks for the good read.

Ok. First let me say I LOVED THIS STORY!! In my opinion you should combine all three of these stories into one book and self publish. I follow many of the blogging ladies on face book and they would love this. And pimp it for free to their followers.

That being said. Was this a brutal story? Yes, but it is something that I believe happens often in our society. And that is what makes this such a great story. It broke my heart with it brutality, yet let me feel hopeful that still people are kind. And also that our court systems, though they are following the law are not always perfect. Truly you are a great writer.

That being said. Please write more on this story. Please DON'T let Janey/ Sky marry Adam. Adam is a good guy no doubt. But he is willing to put what he wants for himself before what he knows Janey really wants. And Janey really loves Ren. See that could be book two to the first one. And the other books could be the other guys finding love themselves. And their you have a series. I would love to have this in book form or in my e-reader. You did a great job with this story.

Lol every time I read this I hate Adam more!

There has to be another chapter!! Has to be! This is unfinished! Yes?!?

I think this is not a good ending for a story very well written till this last chapter.

At list you could stop without this last ending and leave the conclusion to your readers thoughts.

5 stars for the preceding chapters, for me, but not more than 2 for this last.

Very, very sorry.

...or get an editor or both. Things like this are just not acceptable:

"Did you co hearse Miss Wilkinson

I love the previous comment blathering about what isn’t acceptable grammar on a free online story site with thousands of authors of varying educational backgrounds. Shut the fuck up and get over it or get off your ass and offer to be an editor if it bothers you that much.

well done ending!

Great Story, but I,m so glad for the Brad and Tanya stories to make the correct ending