All Comments on 'Rescuing Dianne'

About 3/4 of the way through it switched from first person to third person. I also expected some sort of event at the end, but it just sort of stopped.

Except for the change previously mentioned, it was very good reading. I am really looking forward to the rest of the adventure.

well done nice story

I'm speaking of the crowd (both of them) that think pimping your wife out makes her love you more.

A realistic result of a guy trying to pimp out his wife.

Told well enough, but that change in person is a real howler. Stick with one POV unless you really need to change, and then clearly signal it so readers aren't confused by it.

Good story but as other people have said once the point of view changed to the 3rd person it lost it really. I think decide on whose point of view you will be telling the story from & stick to it otherwise the reader feels like they have missed a page somewhere.

Nice beginning to the story.

This story started well enough and then fizzled. The ‘other man’ who rescues Dianne is using her on the same level as her husband, it’s just more personal with him. What is his motivation? Love? Lust? Unknown. Dianne’s motivation is to escape. She married a man sight unseen and then escapes with a man who for all we know may be the Boston Strangler.

There are two major elements that are missing in this story: character development and an ending. If you want to know how good, a story with a similar plotline can be then read “Winning Denver” by E.Z.Riter.

Except He doesnt make her have sex like her husband do and did the way the man treats her like a woman should be treated with love and understanding the kind she should be given .

And this time it looks like there could be a finish ROFL

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Just about as silly as you would expect from this guy.

Serendipity. Where do you find such abused gorgeous women? (Cinderelly?)