All Comments on 'Road Show 08'

I quite enjoyed this one, though more I think in the beginning than towards the end. What I would say is drop the recaps in future. When nearly 20% of your story is recap it is pretty annoying, as if your reader has the memory of your average fruit plant they can just read the previous parts if they needed. Though I doubt any would need to do so.

Could also have used editing for punctuation, and for wrong or missing word use. This is sloppy at times when it's not even a lot of words.