All Comments on 'Roleplaying Done Right'

The overall idea of your story is not bad (a bit old though): a husband watches cuckold porn together with his wife, and they enjoy it so much that they want to act on it.

However: English clearly isn't your first language, resulting in odd sentence structures and errors. You should let an editor check your work before submitting it. Additionally, you switch tenses quite often, which is a no no. There should be way more paragraphs as well, clearly indicating direct speech and making it easier to read. Last but not least: letting Julia turn into a nasty hotwife so quickly is not very plausible. There should be some corruption or build up before she turns out like that.

In this case, the movie was better than the story.

OK read, not very exciting or erotic to me, and yes I read the tags so I am not bashing the sharing and cuck stuff that is going to take place.

Its your story so do with it as you please.

While not for me, I can understand enjoying watching cuckold porn, but how in the hell do you get from that to actually doing it? I loved watching the Rocky movies, they didn't spark any urge in me to take up boxing!

There's simply nothing sexy or erotic about this nonsense. Why are they even married? Badly thought out drivel.

1 star

No way this sort of story in LW get more than 3*.

JJ

Eagerly waIting for the next chapter. As a cuck hubby for many years I love cuckold stories, especially ones where the wife initiates the cuckolding.

Don’t stop now.

Load of crap.No more.

You started it, and left it hanging.

Don't write in present tense!

HOT STORY , my very hard cock is waiting for part two.