All Comments on 'Sacred and Profane'

Most thought provoking.

I initially thought it was not a romance but can't think of a better genre.

Will be keeping an eye open for hour next tale

What a truly beautiful story!

You need dialogue here. The scene in the hotel would be so much better with it, as dialogue conveys personality and feelings to involve the reader, which "She told me that she..." and "I let her know...", e.g. does not.

Other than the massage question and answer, there is no dialogue in the whole scene. Not taking the time to do that makes this look very rushed and feel flat.

I used to do that also until I realized how pleasurable writing conversations can be, how one line of dialogue can bring the people to life and can tell you more about a character than paragraphs of straight narrative.