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Click hereAnd I realized too how much it changed me, and how much shame and guilt I took on for my part in her denigration, and that I finally feel like I have redeemed myself at least to some extent. I find myself wanting to get it off my chest. But again, who could I tell, that wouldn't condemn me or judge me or call me a fool? Only in the age of the Internet could such a story be possible, and only in this age can I share it with the anonymous horde, anonymously, writing this in the middle of the night on my phone because I can't stop thinking of a girl I only met once. What a weird world!
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Anonymousover 4 years agoYou need dialogue here. The scene in the hotel would be so much better with it, as dialogue conveys personality and feelings to involve the reader, which "She told me that she..." and "I let her know...", e.g. does not.
Other than the massage question and answer, there is no dialogue in the whole scene. Not taking the time to do that makes this look very rushed and feel flat.
I used to do that also until I realized how pleasurable writing conversations can be, how one line of dialogue can bring the people to life and can tell you more about a character than paragraphs of straight narrative.
AnnaValley11almost 5 years agoMost thought provoking.
I initially thought it was not a romance but can't think of a better genre.
Will be keeping an eye open for hour next tale
