All Comments on 'Sapphire Lane - The Adoptee Pt. 01'

Interesting, if bit odd set of characters — not odd in a negative way, more like caricatures waiting for development. Your author comments suggest where this tale is going. On board to see how you develop the relationships.

Very good story

Fabolous start! Looking forward to reading more!

Thanks for the comments, plenty more to come!

Some mistakes, not very important but caught my eye.

Interesting! I would like to see where this leads. Thank you for sharing.

There isn't one factor of this story that has any form of credence to it. This was so off reality I'm not going to bother with any forthcoming chapters. 1* is way too generous.

This isn't meant to be a realistic story, just smutty fantasy so if you want realism, stay away from my stories!

Great start, as you say not very realistic but great fun.

I think Cassidy is going to have to be a very good little girl for mom and mommy.

I do hope she is loved and cared for, as well as having lots of naughty fun!

My goodness this was amazing. I know it's not realistic and all, but it's so gentle and sweet. Can't wait to read more of this. Keep writing!!!

Nice beginning. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

I’m very open, and I’ve read and really enjoyed 5 chapters of this now, but I have to admit this feels like a “groomer” series.

Not critiquing, the story-line is very good, and maybe it’s an honest lust…but its starting to feel like this isn’t a genuine eros, but a “grooming” kink.

And I’m not ok with that.

Reality Check?

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