All Comments on 'Sarah's Story 01'

Who is Amy? In this story about you, Lisa and Jen, suddenly Amy appears. Her name is mentioned 6 times, in one case in the same sentence as Jen. It made a nonsense of the story. Do some proofreading!

The name change error does not detract from this fun, highly erotic piece/scene. Yes, short and all about seduction, but you do develop your characters a bit. Title suggests that we will see more of Sarah (and maybe her friends). Nicely done.

Perhaps a little sketchy, but well-written and good erotic fun!