All Comments on 'Searching for Sheila Ch. 01'

Not too badly written. Hopefully chapter 02 won't take too long to post. So many possibilities. Sheila is brainwashed, or she likes what she is doing and gets off on it, or she really was kidnapped and purposely hooked on drugs to make her pliant, the list goes on. Is Tobe Lanscott ready to face the criminals? Does he have what it takes? Only time will tell . . . . hopefully, not too much time before we find out.

Not bad for a start. But one page is too short. 2 pages are good for a first chapter. While too much backstory slows the progress, too little is just as bad. It leaves us wondering how this happened. Granted we don;t need the whole nauseating "we met while in college and she was my first true love", but a little of what could have led up to this would be nice.

I am looking forward to see where this goes, though.

You have left the husbands history unknown, his abilities unknown, and his potential for revenge unknown. All the makings of a really good story, if you add it all up and put it together, this could be a really bloody, juicy, or even mysterious story, with twists and turns, ah the suspense, does the author have it in them, to accomplish greatness, only chapter 2 will tell.

a teaser. I suspect your first three of four chapters should be one chapter. This was not even a full page. That said, it has my interest, but I will refrain from voting until it goes somewhere.

Move on!

that I read this one. The problem as presented is an interesting one. If she really likes what she is doing there is nothing to be done. But he feels guilty and responsible, and perhaps does not really believe what is happening... Interesting. I will read another chapter.

Yes, but you have my interest!

Your initial chapter is good and leaves the reader with wanting more, basically at this stage having the husband search for his wife. But I agree with an earlier commenter Chagrined that the chapter is too short. When is Chapter 2 to be posted?

when I see the conclusion and outcome of this series. Looks good but brief so far.

Redding gave him the best advice anyone could give. Move on, when he decided to chase after this dirty cunt I lost interest. Story is over!

Hope this isn't a really long multi chapter'd wimp story.

Best thing he can do is find Shiela and Maggard, kill both of them and hope he gets away with it

Oh come on now! A hard-on while watching his wife being screwed and degraded? Need to loose that train of thought and maybe it could be salvaged.

As for Sheila I doubt she is worth chasing after. Best to just divorce her and move the hell on. She's probably a walking clap trap now.

Keep it going!

Too soon to tell just where this story will take the reader, but it has my interest.

thanks for the read

Getting a hard on watching your wife get abused gets you downgrated to a 1*.

So what happened to the wife? Is she a willing whore or was she broken by the asshole pimp. We shall see...

An interesting start.

I have been told that I have a strong sense of duty but I would have taken the detectives advice as soon as I knew she had not been kidnapped and headed to a lawyer.

Left of her free will ?

Okay, bye.

The cop doesn't know where the wife is, so obviously nobody has found her and interviewed her to be sure that she's a willing participant and not being coerced or drugged into doing what she's doing?

"Tobe could only make out three of the blinking letters. R-U-N-S."

First, I note that the comment DW references, "Stalking_Anon", is not posted here as of 17 July 2017.

Next,

Google "Sperm Wars" by Robin Baker, Ph.D., in which he proposes that a male's sexual arousal when seeing the male's female partner copulating with another male is an evolutionary response for the male spouse. Presumably after displacing the interloper, the male has an increased desire to have sex with the woman, using a penis with a glans designed to scoop out the interloper's semen during the outward stroke of the penis. In that way, the male can displace the interloper's sperm with his own to fertilize the woman. Baker also suggests that up to 99% of male sperm is not produced to fertilize, but rather is "Kamikaze" sperm--hunter/killer sperm, some blocking entry to the cervix by "intruder" sperm and some to attack and destroy any other male's sperm in the woman.

So the male is evolutionarily programmed to get aroused when seeing his female partner cheat. Baker also apparently posits that cunnilingus forvthe male also serves the purpose of seeing/smellin/tasting if the female has been unfaithful and so mete knowledge is enough to trigger heightened arousal.

So DW, maybe our cop is simply having a biological response from when our ancestors were still swinging from trees. Or, (given some of Dr. Baker's critics' opinions), maybe our cop is just a pervert.

Judging by the tags, this author didn’t miss much of what he needed to cook up this POS.