- Loving Wives
- Secret Beach
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Click here"Michael!?" She said with a surprised look on her face.
"Hi" was all I said.
She stood staring at me for a moment and then briefly hugged me. Gail continued her tour of the house on her own. Allison and I stood awkwardly for a moment in the kitchen.
"This is a nice house." I stated, honestly. "I think we're interested."
She stood there looking at me, still confused at the situation. Finally she handed me the flier on the house and encouraged me to explore and ask any questions I may have.
I caught up with Gail in the backyard by the pool.
"I really like it, don't you?" Gail asked me.
"Do you know who the real estate agent is?" I asked her.
"Yeah, I noticed her as we walked in," she told me.
"You did? Why didn't you say something?" I asked.
"Because it really doesn't matter," she answered matter of factly, "now go get the details from her. In this market we need to move fast." She added.
I told Allison we were interested and we wanted to make an offer. I asked a few more questions and told her we wanted to move quickly.
As I said all this Allison just stared at me, not reacting to what I was saying.
"I'm a little surprised," she told me, not exactly a great sales response, "I didn't think you were interested in this type of house. You realize the asking price is," and then she held up the sheet with the price on it.
"I get it," I assured her. "We understand the price."
Once again she just stared at me trying to comprehend me wanting this luxurious house with a pool in this neighborhood.
"It's just that," she began, "this is the type of house I always wanted. It seemed like too much for you." She added, abandoning any sales skills she may have had.
"I apologize," I said neutrally, "when we were together, I always wanted this type of home too. The difference was I was willing to wait until it made sense. I knew I would get there. You and I just had different time tables."
She just stared at me comprehending what I told her. At that moment Gail, all six months pregnant of her, walked in.
"Nice to see you Allison," Gail said with little emotion, "now about the house," she began, pleasantries over, and then the discussion progressed.
Later after we began the process of the offer Gail and I took one more tour around the yard. As we walked back to the front and down the walkway towards the car I glanced in the large dining room window.
There, sitting at the dining room table face in her hands, shoulders shaking, tears streaming down her face, sat Allison. I could not help but think she was thinking about how different a life that could've been hers if she had just been patient.
It would have been far too cruel to tell her I told you so.
THE END
Note to readers: to some it may seem like a lack of severe revenge on Allison. (fairly severe toward Adrian). In some of my previous stories there have been far more blatant revenges. Including being fed to sharks, a couple of deadly construction site booby traps, being fed to Komodo Dragons, poison frog venom, a gypsy curse, kidnapped by a motorcycle gang, and being pushed off a cliff, and there are others too.
In this story the revenge is showing a life that the woman (Ali) could have had, and though less severe than some of my other stories, she has to live with her mistakes for the rest of her life. Maybe not immediately painful, but a long slow reminder of her errors.
One other thing: Secret Beach is a real place and if you ever get to Kauai it is a beach certainly worth checking out. The scenery can be spectacular, in more ways than one.
- COMMENTS
Anonymous24 days agoHonestly, Ali probably had the harshest revenge she could have experienced that wasn’t based on sexual violence or actual physical violence. I think that even if she had become a millionaire she’d have come to deeply regret the loss of life and future with her husband.
nixrox4 months ago1 star - The inclusion of violence in this LW story automatically gets a one-star rating - no matter how great the writing might be.
AngelRider4 months agoOf all the stories on here with violent revenge plots, this one I can actually believe. A rich sociopath that gets off on torture going after someone who wronged him financially?
Yeah, I absolutely believe that's plausible.
I liked this a lot.
phill1c9 months agoIf you have to "punish" someone, how are you actually better than they are? Someone leaves you, you move on. Wasting time on revenge and all that nonsense just wastes your time and diminishes you. Nobody with any sense is going to say, "yeah, he killed that guy, who was fucking his wife. Left 3 kids without a father and two families shattered. Great job, man!!"
Willowghby10 months agoSo, most glaring is the dinner at ZeeZee then again at the old marital home with the ex-wife. Seriously? We then discover the MC and his new squeeze bumped uglies and committed to an exclusive relationship before leaving Hawaii. Seems a major violation on Michael's part. That's compounded by his dithering and residual attraction to the bitch that dumped, humiliated, and dissed him.
Then there's the delay in revealing the last three days of the Hawaii vacation. Sorry, that plot device just didn't work for me.
Finally, getting Chester to cut Adrian's dick off was way OTT.
Meanwhile, a generally smooth and well paced plot. Good character development and believable dialog. Thanks for an entertaining story, Gumbo.
Keep 'em comin'.
enderlocke7711 months agoNow readers, I need to ask you a favor. I'm going to skip ahead several days, but I promise the activity of those skipped days will be filled in.
rofl derailed i mean should i even keep reading
Anonymous11 months agoWhy are some commenters blaming the MC? He didn't prioritize his life over his wife. What story did you read? Alison didn't leave him over feeling abandoned. She was consumed by avarice. She bought into Adrian's bs. She started a close working relationship with him as a corporate secretary and spent a ton of time with him, invested her inheritance and then started sleeping with guy, less from lust apparently and more to get good terms on her investment. Seriously when he confronted her about Novacim (btw there are several phases of clinical trials, so.in rea life no way get to approval reviews until pass all (usually) three of them, each one escalating and larger in scope) and the envelopes, he learned that she had invested all that money without consulting with him. We never really know when Alison started screwing Adrian. She certainly was enticing Adrian and letting her know her interest back at that party. We're they screwing back then? Nah unlikely. But they were screwing a few weeks before the showdown with Adrian in his house and certainly when the MC yelled at her she just left and wrnt to Adrian's to hang out, screw, get more seduced, and thought about what she wanted in life. And by the time he talked to her, she had excited it wasn't her husband. How is that the fault of the MC? She wanted thr lifestyle and the money and a big house. Even later after thr collapse she led with how she always wanted a big house and a great lifestyle with travel, luxury, excitement, etc. Well she ended up with squat. Ending was good. Money is the leading reason for divorce. Not necessarily trading up. But still money related issues.
Bri2911 months agoI absolutely loved it Gumbo ,I normally struggle to read long stories but this was a easy read and kept my attention ,and I agree their was no need for btb revenge on Alison she got her just deserts in the end .Well done 5⭐️👌
Anonymous12 months agoThis is a very good tale and presented well. nothing over the top,all as in every day life reactions to issues cropping up..myself I could not or could ever develop any feelings for your MC or in real life any husband that places more importance on his job at the expense of his personal/family life..A job is just a means to an end no matter how much one likes it..He deserved the situation he ended up in,an errant wife and the end of a marriage..No I do not condone what she did, but As you presented him,he simple filed away to many red flags,ignored them to take care of lesser work issues, left them on the back burner instead of acting upon what his eyes revelled to him..He is not as intelligent as you presented him or he did not care about staying married...just my view..5 stars...JZK...mostly you are an enjoyable read,a good yarn takes time to tell...
