All Comments on 'Seeing in Color 01'

Sorry, but this is unreadable in its current form. Please add in quotes in the dialogues and resubmit. I'll be happy to give the story another try when I am not forced to guess which is what.

Still, thank you for writing this, it is an interesting concept.

as Anon said. you could use a Beta reader. new eyes find the things which your mind hides. That said it is a good story. and can go in so many ways from this point. Please give us more. 5 stars in spite of the grammar issues.