All Comments on 'Selfbondage in the Woods'

A nice quickie that needs a follow up. 5*

..try to do a little proof reading first!

With such a short tale the errors just stand out even more.

A spell check isn't enough, it won't catch misplaced capitals or using the wrong but correctly spelled words.. e.g.. "dawned" vs "donned"

Also, if the visitor was 'pushing' her hands away then she should have also been grabbING the box. Keep the same tense.

Speech starts a new line.

Like I say, with a tale that is only 17 paragraphs long, the number of grammatical and punctuation errors here would not be acceptable to even a middle school teacher.