by VirgoPisces
Very good, until...third person became first person: "Cum for me!" I tell Rosalin, pounding in and out of her lascivious pussy.
"Soon!" she cries.
"No! Now!" I demand!.
I feel her pussy spasm and I am abruptly trapped inside her and she cries out in tormenting pleasure!
"Oh FUCK!" I grunt, loud enough to fill the house, and let loose a violent flow of cum.
When you're writing about your own fantasy...or reality, you need to be careful about that.