by Galloglaich
So far I have found this series to be a very interesting read. Please keep up the good work.
Another fine chapter. A couple chapters ago, I commented on how this shifted from what felt like a light-hearted comedy to something darker and more serious. I wasn't sure I liked it then but I sure like it now.
The only thing that bothers me is the half dozen intrigues running in the background and how no one seems to notice. How could you not have Allen flagged as an issue in an organization like that? Same with the missing phone and cheerleaders.
But I am sure I will enjoy how you tie this all up. That just brought an image if the Sucubus sub to mind. Fun time ahead!
very twisted and capable writer. I can not get enough of new twists in this story .LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Glad to see the positive reviews for this chapter, great job! Look forward to more.
That I think was the best chapter so far. I like the direction the series is taken, but I'm curious about Tom's school/social life and whether he's an outcast or not. Keep up the great writing, and hopefully, we can have the next installment soon.
-G
I love coming across stories that have actual plot and good writing. As such, this is an incredible find! Enjoying every bit of it! I'm really looking forward to more!
One glaring mistake was when Tom read her file it stated specifically she was a succubus, but later it stated he had no idea she was a succubus. Story was still great.