All Comments on 'Sexy Ever After'

Great!

Much more please?

The story is good and sexy, but you should find yourself a proofreader; your verb tenses are all over the place and your use of apostrophes is spotty.

A great 1st effort!

11/10 Succubi !!!!!

Hi all, thanks for reading my random story. I promise what I submitted had better punctuation (I think) but I'm not an aspiring writer or anything, so I'll try to do better if I post again - I now see that there are editors and proof readers on offer here so I'll be sure to utilise one next time.

Please don't hesitate to provide any feed back. I'm sexually awkward with a very limited erotic vocabulary and can use a lot of feed back :)

Have a great day.