All Comments on 'Shadowed Guardian'

Good Start, could not give a 5 as there is not enough story to know if its truly that good yet.

it is way to short, and with that being said the girl seems like a spoiled brat already, that's the only thing I got from this short tale is the main female character is a spoiled bratty bitch. But I will read the next chapter to see where you are going to take this.

Ok, you have me hooked, now I want the adventure! Woohoo, can't wait!!!

This was way too short for a first submission. There is no way readers can connect with characters in such a short piece. The first chapter needs to reel in the reader to want to read the next chapter. Honestly, I did not feel that with this story. You might also want to get an editor from the volunteer editor program here on Lit. There are many glaring erros, such as capitalization, quotes and comma usage.