All Comments on 'Shooting Stars Always Burn Out'

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CruzinSuziCruzinSuziover 8 years ago
Soo Hot

I love their hotness. So erotic. Can't wait to see more from you.

redlion75redlion75over 8 years ago

why can these not be numbered 1 thru ?

Ariana_GarveyAriana_Garveyover 8 years agoAuthor
I don't want to number them

I'm sorry if that bothers. Though...not sorry enough to number them. Please stop asking.

Respectfully,

Ariana

IronDragonIronDragonover 8 years ago
A little constructive criticism if I may...

Let me start off by saying that I really like the tale so far. You definitely have some talent as a writer!

As far as people wanting the chapters numbered, it isn't necessary. They can see by the release date next to each one, which one comes first, next, and last.

Ok, finally the criticism part: Each chapter is WAY too short, IMO. You could put all three of these chapters into one tale and it wouldn't even take up 2 full Lit pages. It's up to you, of course, but when it only takes less than 2 minutes to read something, readers tend to lose interest. Especially if it takes a while to post each bite-sized morsel.

Anyways, keep writing!

5 Stars :)

Ariana_GarveyAriana_Garveyover 8 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the input

I actually do appreciate you taking the time to comment. These "stories" however are just excerpts from a novel I'm trying to write. I'm posting a few here and there to see how people like them, but they'll eventually all be woven into a whole story. Ariana and Patrick aren't even my only characters. Just my favorites.

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Just here to play around with some fantasies. I hope you like them.