All Comments on 'Slave takes Mistress to Hawaii'

It was two very hot stories but I hated the way that it jumped back and for the between the two. It would have been 5 stars but this way, it felt more like 3 stars.

Thank you for writing and posting here.

@FailedScout - thanks for taking time to read my story and leave feedback. I deliberately wanted to play with narrative in this one because I enjoy "origin" stories but also appreciate seeing a more evolved relationship. Some of the transitions were a bit more jarring than others. But my favorite "discovery" through writing this was creating the Mistress Morrigan character. Expect to see her in future stories with more linear narratives. Cheers!