All Comments on 'Smartphone Spellbook Ch. 03'

Not a bad storyline idea but this 1 pg chapter stuff makes for choppy, stilted reading. When your chapters grow, so will the ratings

Love the story so far. Keep it up!

I gave you 5 because I want to read more - but I would prefer a slightly longer wait and a longer story

Thanks

Needs to be longer. 2 stars because it's chapter 3 & all that's happened is a bloke has wanked onto a phone

I hate inconsistencies, vex was talking from their first encounter. Please know your own story line. A few flaws I can deal with, but you made this look like an amazing revelation. "You can talk?" (yes, 2 chapters ago)

@ereaderl

I think u misunderstood here something. Vex hasn't talked to him in Ch01. You might've perceived it as "talking" but conversations between them were text-based (she texted, he talked).

1 page chapters...i hate them.

I get this is a site for sex stories but come on, you can suddenly use magic and all you want to do is have your step sister as a slave, really? Its a massive waste, there's clearly been thought gone into the spell making, i suppose the thinking stopped at that though

What’s the bet he has to screw the demon at some stage

4/5