All Comments on 'Smartphone Spellbook Ch. 05'

Thank you for accepting the suggestions for a longer chapter

You really need to get your pronouns straight. You're CONSTANTLY confusing: his/her, he/she, etc; and you probably got those wrong more often than you got them right.

I’m not usually interested in the SF category of stories but this one has caught my attention and I’m thoroughly enjoying it.

The longer chapter is definitely welcome and provides a deeper appreciation of your writing - 2 or 3 pages its ideal for my liking.

Now let’s see hire Vex can help him seduce the lovely Ruby!

not a huge fan of her having a dick

Excellent thus far...... I await the next chapter with a dripping cunt... giggle

Her having a dick kind of sucks. Would of been so much better if she was just a succubus. Hopefully there's no sharing of his women or vex ntring him.

Not really, I think her heaving a cock is pretty hot and fucked up (witch I like by te way). I do hope she is goin to put it to good use. Please have her enlave a women with that cock.

It sucks when writers with homosexual desires screw up a story with transiting sexes and putting dicks on women. Dude, just be honest with yourself about being gay and write in the category. FFS, grow a pair.

That was good

5/5

Don't listen to the close minded put a dick on everyone if you want or dont do it it's your story you decide what to do