by DamageReport
Yeah, I'm 100% with James, why wait. So, drop that being cool bullcrap, and just go with the flow.
Everything about this was a bit too quick. Could have been better with more character development and certainly more foreplay with proper preparation before actual act.
(Constructive criticism I hope and not intended to be mean.)
Thanks for the feedback. I also thought it was rushed. I was kinda caught up in the moment while writing it.