Spring Break Surprise

I think this is one of the best stories I’ve read in a long time. It was well presented with just the right amount of buildup. As always when there is a great story I think a follow up is warranted. I hope so, please.

Excellent writing, careful, editing, and a refreshingly firm grasp on basic grammar. I did not mind the length per se, but I did find that after such a long and careful build up the eventual sex – although well written – was slightly anticlimactic and abrupt.

The only complaint I have regarding the narrative is the smoking scene, which was a major turn off and inconsistent with the characters. You could have explored so many fabulous options for her final full nudity, rather than standing around with a bunch of losers smoking in a crowded gazebo.

Good story, well written, and worthy use of enough supporting words / comments to paint a decent picture of the action.

Great story, well done!

Best story ever!

A great yarn!

Spring Break in the US sense is not something that Australians share - our closest analogue is "Schoolies" - the annual end-of-highschool event where there is certainly lots of booze and sex - but given that most participants are only 18, it's not as hedonistic.

That, coupled with the fact that I'm too old for those shenanigans means I don't have memories like those of Brian and Libby - but your writing makes me feel as if I have :-)

Excellent story. Loved it.

Thanks for a great story.

I love this story, which explains why I just read it again for the third time over the past few months. Well written, carefully edited, supremely hot and sexy, its vivid imagery pulls me right into every moment and keeps me engaged and invested. I really want these two to continue together, and hope you do too. Thank you for a satisfying and sexy read.

@Anonymous- All the main characters in my stories are based on people I've actually known. Their trait combinations may be rare, but they aren't at all unbelievable. I'm a big guy who played college football and majored in engineering, myself. Not everyone fits a narrow stereotype.

Generally speaking, what's missing in 98% of Literotica stories is decent writing. This is one of those rare Literotica tales where the author can actually write. A good editor might have cut substantially from the story's second half, which would have improved it even further. That, plus some careful rewriting of some of the closing sexual

romps, is all that stands in the way excellence. Still, this guy is a hell of a writer. Congratulations are in order.

Moved to the top of my favorite authors list. Hope you will have time to provide more works of art like this. 👍

Couldn’t get past the intro. Brian is an engineering major AND played football in college? He’s nerdy, kind, smart, ans 6’3”? Libby is a business major who just on a whim got into law school and is still weighing out her options? Seems like you tried to fit the best of so many worlds in each person’s character that it’s just unrealistic. Also Brian does not talk or act like someone who is 6’3” and built like a line backer. He talks and thinks like someone who is 5’7”, nerdy, and sweet… probably chubby. You don’t have to have all the characteristics of all humans in a story to make it a good story but now it just seems like you’re trying too hard to be impressive. I didn’t rate your story because that would’ve been unfair as I couldn’t get past the intro.

Excellently written. Leaves you wondering what happens next.

Great story!