All Comments on 'Spring Slam'

only one word: wonderful

Great story! Shy glances, brushing up accidentally (but not really accidentally), furtive kisses, sneaking around, and then taking full advantage when an opportunity presents itself. That pacing made your story especially sweet and especially erotic. And thank you for celebrating Kennedy’s less-than-centerfold physical features. The one you love is lovely because she is the one you love.

I hadn’t noticed til now that this is your first submission here. Well done! I can be a grammarian nitpicker but find nothing to nitpick here. Mechanics, clarity, varied sentence structure, and word choice are all handled well.

Hope to see more of your writing, and hope to meet more of your characters. Cheers to you FDN!

Breathtaking

Great story. This defiantly needs a part 2

Nice.... but I hate condoms.... He should give her oral sex... When can we enjoy part 2?

Truly amazing work! So much detail and realism.