by Athena_e19
OMG.
This story was looking SO promising by the end of Part 1.
Then, started going all haywire, what with a growing case of 'Reader's Stumble-Through' - i.e., typo's, misspellings and (sorry, but yes,) grade-school-level writing. Damn.
And THEN, (for me, at least, what was) the Coup de grĂ¢ce: A brutal, pointless, M/f rape-scene that helped the story about as much as would have a quick swing through T.J. just so the slave-in-training could maybe take-in one of 'them there girl-n-burro-shows' he'd heard so much about, before being whisked off to become a more 'wordly and well-traveled' slaveboy in his Mistress' star system. FLEAS-n-LICE!
Oh, well - at least ya tried - sorta.
Just as a rule for future reference, FemDom readers don't really ~CARE~ if the poor, whipped-thrice-daily slave-dawg gets himself any 'comeback'. Really. hell; most of us' would quite rather he DIDN'T, truth-be-known.
SCREW 'IM - he's a slaveboy/girltoy - just a life-support system for a tongue and cock. NOTHING MORE.
Word.
Someone's gotta do it...right ?
Alright everybody, I'm expendable...I "volunteer"
to be the distraction. When I give "the" signal,
hide and when the timing's right, make your
escape (out the back door, through the woods to
the river where the canoe is hidden). You'll only
have 14 hours to get as far away as you can while
I distract the 15 horny women with the H2O
retention problem, but I'll do it ! Just please,
someone tell little Suziepuss that I love her and
that her "Goldenboy" had to take one for the team.
...................... I love this story .........................