All Comments on 'Starstruck Ch. 04-06'

the first chapters so much it was nice to go on and read the next one right away...glad i found this story and looking forward as to where this one is going. Great job on the writing and especially being one of you first attempts...amazing...keep up the great work. respectfully fan in Texas naynay

tiny quibbles - I think one reader already mentioned that Americans don't refer their country as 'America'. They call it the U.S., U.S.A. or the States, among other terms. And they don't usually use 'bloody' as a swear-word. It's the Brits who use them (I don't know if Aussies, Kiwis or South Africans use 'bloody' as well). Since you're not American, but are writing a story about an American teenager, I think she should speak more like it. Tip: maybe you could watch more Hollywood movies? =) For a first novel, this is quite good.

You really need to learn the difference between your & you're.