All Comments on 'Step Brothers Bride Pt. 02'

by TurboT81

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Anonymousover 5 years ago

WOW

Great story. I love reading hot ass fuck stories. Is a step bros wife to be incest? I fail to see how but oh well.

2 stars

DragonRider55

Dunkirk over 5 years ago

Bride

He should fuck Jennifer silly. When she sports a baby bump it should be her brother in law's child

goducks1 over 5 years ago

sexy story

very short on the tease, just a quickie sexy story

Anonymousover 5 years ago

"... as her silk nightie slowly rid up her body."

'Rid'???

RODE!

Also, some of the time you used Past tense - example - "... she replied', other times you used Present tense - example - "... "... I instruct her as ...."

TurboT81 over 5 years agoAuthor

Thanks

Thanks for the feedback, only my 2nd story so if I continue i'll try to work the mistakes out, I feel this is much better written/presented than my 1st story. In response to Dragon55 I'm unsure why the moderator changed it from an Anal story to Incest/Taboo.

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