All Comments on 'Stories We Ruined Together Pt. 09'

While staying at Ed’s, a disclosure

Reveals an ungranted exposure

Her convo with Mary

Gives cause to be wary

And completely upends her composure

5 stars

Am thoroughly enjoying “Stories We Ruined Together” because the storyline and characters together make for excellent fiction — captivating from the start and fun to reflect on both. Your protagonist is so believably real as she shares her insecurities and emerging feelings. I like how you interrupt your story from time to time to speak directly to us — or maybe talking to yourself as author. You did so at the start of the first chapter, which simply increased my curiosity for what would follow. This chapter is beautifully crafted as so much emerges from the subtle to the emotionally charged/raw while carrying Liz from a romantic high to a very troubled state all in short written space within one evening of story space. Very meaningful/consequential that she senses something a bit off about the endings to Ed’s storylines — forced happiness probably says a lot about what moves/shapes Ed. We are likely to learn more about Ed. The subtle gives way to a dramatic bathroom scene with Mary made all the more pivotal because Liz is feeling romantically upbeat about herself and their relationship leaving aside reservations about Ed’s writing and an erotic scene she probably could take or leave. A couple of Liz’s lines resonate for me. While momentarily thinking about Mary’s nervousness, Liz reflects: “I do that sometimes -- forget to remember that other people have hidden issues too.” Profoundly reminded of that truth in the next few minutes. Secondly: “Privacy had always been precious to me, and trust had always come slowly.” Those two separate social constructs are deliberately linked here. Looking forward to how hidden issues, privacy and trust play out. Hey, cannot help overthinking; it’s fun because your writing is very creative.

Am thoroughly enjoying “Stories We Ruined Together” because the storyline and characters together make for excellent fiction — captivating from the start and fun to reflect on both. Your protagonist is so believably real as she shares her insecurities and emerging feelings. I like how you interrupt your story from time to time to speak directly to us — or maybe talking to yourself as author. You did so at the start of the first chapter, which simply increased my curiosity for what would follow. This chapter is beautifully crafted as so much emerges from the subtle to the emotionally charged/raw while carrying Liz from a romantic high to a very troubled state all in short written space within one evening of story space. Very meaningful/consequential that she senses something a bit off about the endings to Ed’s storylines — forced happiness probably says a lot about what moves/shapes Ed. The subtle gives way to a dramatic bathroom scene with Mary made all the more pivotal because Liz is feeling romantically upbeat about herself and their relationship leaving aside reservations about Ed’s writing and an erotic scene she probably could take or leave. A couple of Liz’s lines resonate for me. While momentarily thinking about Mary’s nervousness, Liz reflects: “I do that sometimes -- forget to remember that other people have hidden issues too.” Profoundly reminded of that truth in the next few minutes. Secondly: “Privacy had always been precious to me, and trust had always come slowly.” Those two separate social constructs are deliberately linked here. Looking forward to how hidden issues, privacy and trust play out. Hey, cannot help overthinking; it’s fun because your writing is very creative.

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