All Comments on 'Strange Car in the Driveway: Sequel'

I believe this wife needed to be destroyed utterly, this was not it. It was just not painful enough of a revenge story. And yes, the husband had revenge. He shut down and lived his life dying a little everyday, that is his revenge. This was just sad.

REALLY?

I gave this story a 1 because this site is not set up to accept negative number ratings. So other than the lowest number possible I would also like to say to the writer...FUCK YOU !!!

The several stories you wrote all have one thing in common....the wronged party always gets fucked over by the end !!!

If you had any BALLS maybe you could write a BTB story but until then....STOP taking it up the ass !!!

the mans at fault and the woman was right to cheat, this is why Trump won, this female point of view.

Racc shit kill them both and the mom and the sister...listen u you fem try to write real story where the men are not wimps or yes men. So she is smart but she cant find a way to show she sees his side? and yes killing the slut with while a crime is not a sin....he is not murdering but killing her to clear his mind and focus. You cant murder a slut, you are just cleaning the gene pool.

First - it makes no sense. She thinks he killed himself, she rushes home but doesn't find a body and then jumps in to bed with Greg??

Second- while not a big fan of BTB there certainly needed some vengeance on cheating Greg.

Third - I hate when the innocent victim leads a sad lonely life. Why couldn't he have found someone else? Best revenge is living well.

The beginning of the story was good and definitely what I was feeling but then it veered way way off course.

Thank you for trying to conclude the story. I really hate when authors leave a story open ended like the original.

Sorry, it is. Weak pathetic male character, can't find another partner and can never be happy again. Blah

Won't read anymore from this author, it is probably all the same crap.

No forgiveness here, to bad. I would of made her jump through hoops to get her family back, eventually I'd of forgiven her, eventually. He couldn't find someone else? What utter BS!

You took something original and drowned it in mendacity.

stick to original writing, this "sequel" was "awful"

... but it fails. No way she jumps in bed with her guy when she thinks her husband has just shot himself..

Revenge for Reg

You gave that predator a wonderful lfe

Pure crapola!

Where did she think his body went,with no blood around,when she and the weasel showed up at the house? And she'd start fuckin' the weasel without knowing what had actually happened?

And the dipshit husband! Why the fuck didn't he stop the weasel if he really loved his wife?

No sir! The whole fuckin' thing just doesn't make a damn bit of sense!

Too many inconsistences, not enough revenge. No need to repeat what other commenters have said. Four stars for the great way he raised the kids.

I only get upset about two things 1. Writers who waste our time and don't finish a story complete arrogance

2.idiots who think they write better than 1. And don't know how stupid they make themselves look again complete arrogance

Oh my husband just blew his brain out I must fuck someone right now.

Hard to believe that she was so distraught over the supposed suicide of her husband that she fell in bed with Reg. How in the hell is that a mood maker?

when the wife and reg arrived and there was no corpse. She was distraught, so she decided, hey ill just fuck this guy here. The plot here is unbelievable, unless the wake is mental.

pathetic cuck shit.

Your sequel is only pathetic crap!!!

First I would have been waiting behind front door and just as soon as soon as wife got inside door slam in Reggies face and she would get an ultimatum. I think this might have broken the Reggie spell. Neither were happy apart from each other.

Give it up you suck,

Nice ploy with the book. Wife enters the bedroom not finding a body, bloody brains all over the wall and no evidence of a shooting. She then immediately starts having sex with her writer/partner. What??????? Too foolish to even consider.

How does he get the kids? She doesn't even visit them after the divorce.

This version has more holes than swiss cheese.

She runs into the bedroom and doesn't wonder why there isn't a dead body?

He gets custody of the kids but the wife doesn't visit at all? First of all, why didn't they get shared custody? Second, even if he has custody she would still get visitation, and even stupid bitches care about their children. No amount of guilt would stop her from seeing her kids.

What about Penny (Reg's wife) and his two kids? Was that all made up? I could believe that but you didn't even mention it.

What about Kara? Would have been nice to get her reaction since she was part of the last story.

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Some other Criticism:

The teacher likes seeing Reg destroy marriages? I never heard that from even the craziest of feminists. Wouldn't Reg seducing women and treating them like trash be a part of the patriarchy and a sign of his disrespect towards women? I could see this thinking come from a woman scorned who now hates men or a slut that doesn't give a shit, but not a feminist.

The sex on the bed seemed to be entirely done to make sure they wouldn't get back together. Going along with it all being an act would have been much more interesting. Seems like you thought it would have been too challenging and took the easy route.

Also, I have a complaint about the original story but since I'm writing this I might as well just leave it here. Why was his boss let in on it? Vera could have just said she is planning something special. The boss probably would have been more willing to let him go if she did that. It added unnecessary drama.

Some of the worst shit written on this site! Why the hell didn't he break in on them when they actually did start to fuck and pound the hell out of the ass-wipe???

Why the hell did you let the ass-wipe "slide" in the story???

Maybe because you're as big and ass-wipe as your characters!

You'll notice that must of the critics are Anonymous and they'll rather vulgar in their critiques. Sad. You've written better stories and this one is not your best, but keep writing maybe your future critics will have their heads out of their asses.

Not my favorite of your stories. When she didn't find the body on the floor, there should have been a major, "What, what?!?" moment that might have backed them up from the precipice. Maybe not...her actions with the play were quite cruel...but maybe. By not exploring that obvious plot hole, the rest didn't work for me.

but not believable. Where was the body etc etc.

Or is the Aftermath told strictly from a third person’s view? The voicing sounds like Gary narrating as the story as an omniscient viewer. If so, then within the story he finds out about Reg ‘s little gambit. If so this is the time to finish the guy. Dark alley? Oops, he ran into my iron pipe i found at the construction yard.. It’s too bad no one was there to see the accident, so could dial 911.

I really like the turn that was done using Vera’s letter. Very clever of the author. Excellent story line. Reasonably believable dialog. No major grammatical or spelling error. This is a so,id 4-stars, maybe even 4.5-stars. But I only (almost) give 5 stars to pieces I feel MIGHT become a Literotica classic (or already is and I’m just tossing in my 2 cents). So, 4-stars it is.

dumber than the original shit. *

Except at the end when Reg got away with everything. Was he really married with children? His Prof is a grate one asshole

In the original story Penny, Reg and Vera were at the Denny's monitoring the bedroom.

On hearing Gary apparently shoot himself they rushed back to the house - with no further mention of Penny - why?

Did she stay for another coffee?

On finding the bedroom empty why did they not suspect a trap? considering they thought Gary had a gun?

My own inclination would be to get away to a safe distance as quickly as possible. Not let's have sex on the marital bed and see if we can draw him out. That's just inviting coitus mortus.

The rest of it could possibly work if it were thought through - although as it stands little or no improvement on the unfinished original.

Sorry.

That should have been "coitus mortis"

Still Reg needed his head smashed in with a 9 iron.

what happened to penny at denies?

slap hapy papy #9

I think edrider73 has some major manhood issues not just based on this story either. In all his stories the men are all treated like dirt by women who are assholes. These assholes never face any consequences, nor do they have any redeeming characteristics at all. He also leaves too many stories unfinished just like this one. I'm not sure what his goal is in all that. It's not quite how I would have ended the story but I'm no author.

make a worth reading story. Original was bad, sequel no better. Cruelty upon cruelty, should have sued his boss. SAD.

Or is the entire plot premised on Vera rushing home convinced her beloved Gary was lying on the bedroom floor in a pool of blood and not noticing there was neither blood nor body when she and Reg charged in? Explain.

What a ride!

I loved it............and hated it.

Then I loved it.

Then I hated it again!

As mentioned in the previous comment there is a glaring weakness in the story.

NO BODY!

There are others...............

If there is no body he must have messed up and could still be in the house somewhere, wounded! His boss should get canned! His employer should be sued! The lecturer should get canned! The university should be sued!

EXCEPT............

Why would he shoot himself in the first place???? If he is that pissed off....shoot her!

Alternative ending????

The gun really was one of a pair; He gets some tomato sauce, smears some on his head, and pours some on floor; pushes door shut and fires a couple or three rounds into the mattress so the powder smell will mask any tomato smell (and closed door keeps the room sealed) then lies on the floor on the 'blood'; the couple walk in, she picks up the gun and shoots herself............and hubby and Reg are left in deep shit!

That's saying a lot considering how bad the first one was. There wasn't a body... I don't think I need to say any more about that. Reg gets away with doing his BS and apparently is praised for it... okay.

Hardest I've ever seen anybody get cucked. Old georgie boy seems to got a knack for some hardcore cucking.

Even under extreme pressure Gary kept his head. Rather than going to jail for assault, he was rewarded custody of his daughters. MANY stockbrokers are morally unethical pond scum selling imaginary fake bullshit, (paper) that they claim, while hiding behind a corporate disclaimer, that these investments are solid and have value, HAH! Thus the acting class to hone his skills at spin and BS. Vera was a manipulative and convincing SKANK!!!! Gary won. Corvette John in rainy Seattle

I rarely give one star. I didn’t like this story because of many holes, especially her giving in seconds after checking for. I assume, a body.

Then why did he let the seduction happen?

There was never closure on the story, when they still loved each other ... etc

This is not your normal quality of story writing. The original was better.

In what world do you live in? Vera would have gotten custody, alimony and child support. No Court in any Country gives him custody. No way. No how. Horrible ending.

This is an example of plot driving the characters, instead of the reverse. Human beings just don’t act this way. These characters aren’t believable, and so the plot doesn’t work either. I believe the original story moved you and you wanted to show Vera getting her just desserts, but this just didn’t work for me at all.

We're on a site full of 10-inch dicks, 44-DD hooters, and hooker/strippers with a heart of gold. Yet, people complain that this story is unbelievable.

This is a complete bastardization of EdRider73's clever (although never satisfactorily finished) story of doing rather too much for the sake of your art.

The story simply doesn't conform to any discernible logical progression. Hubby telling them that he's going to kill himself, firing the gun and then hiding in the closet to gauge their reaction is a clever and poetic revenge - but following this by having them running into the room, not finding dead hubby and then immediately screwing on the bed is completely ridiculous. The author could have staged his revenge, then taken the view that they were now even and forgiven her, or he could have decided that her prank was unforgivable and opted for divorce. Either path was logical - although I think that divorce is an overreaction - but having them immediately leaping into bed is a prime example of an author trying to appear clever and ending up looking like a complete idiot.

LA

deep pain never goes away and the deeper the longer, TK U MLJ LV NV

I hope she read the letter next to a trash can. That way she could give the proper critique to her mothers (see stupid slut) letter. It would really be disappointing if she actually had to expend the energy it would require to go to a trash can to throw it away.

you fix stupid stories. Or at least make a talented herculean effort to fix stupid stories. I guess no one does a great job every time.

Unless she didn’t fight it at all, how did he get it? I don’t see her not fighting for it. She seemed to hardly feel any guilt about the “play” and affair at all, so wouldn’t feel the need to punish herself with denial to access to the children.

Also, why would he want to deny at least some access to the children to her?

The full custody to him doesn’t make sense in this story.

He appears to have killed himself - so she hurries home to find no dead body, and decides to have sex in the next instant?

No degree of ‘suspension of disbelief’ allows for this absurdity.

Wasted my time.

Does anyone really give shit about happened to the slut. It is all the same just slightly different based on lifestyles. She never finds happiness again, she ends up with loser after loser. She always regrets what she did (ah... boo hoo ). Her family has no respect or interest in her. blah blahrDwYUg blah. She gets what she deserves. good riddance

THE MALE WRITERS LIVE IN A UINVERSE KACED WITH LSD. NO REAL COURT GIVES FULL CUSTODY TO THE DAD , A BOSS DOES NOT LOSE ALPHA STATUS TO A SUB. A WIFE DOES NOT SEE THE ERA OF HER WAYS. YOU GUYS THAT HAVE BEEN RAKED OVER THE COALS NEED TO MAN THE HELL UP.

I think wives in their minds think the judge going give them everything and hubby gets fuck.

What she did was cruel but she hadn't cheated. He should have come up with some other way to punish her. Surely he should have thought about the kids. Of course once she came home and did the deed, a bit ridiculous in my opinion, then that was a different matter.

I would never stay with someone that intentionally inflicted cruelty on me. Its the same as why I'd never do it to another person, certainly not the one person that i'm supposed to have their back in all things.

Even so, she should have been involved in the kids lives. It wasn't their fault and they paid too high of a price (imo).

Vera’s letter to her daughter was pathetic......telling her daughter how to treat people. If her daughter does the right thing she will throw the letter in the trash and give it the thought it deserves. NONE. The daughter has gotten her morality and character from watching and being raised by her father. Advice from that simple minded, diseased

Cunt is not needed nor appreciated. You made your bed and now you can go lie in it. To bad it is nasty, lumpy and stinks. Enjoy the fruits of your labor.

As far as the university drama professor and her lead actor. It is just a matter of time before you cross the wrong husband and they meet a sudden and permanent end.

thats bull let the character find someone worthy of him nt this crap. No reconciliation with the witch and that feminist crap is prob true( if you are one of those cunts i hope you die a painful death you are a cancer on the world). 3 stars him being alone lost alot of the shine on the story

First of all, quit yelling. Second, you are illiterate. Third, you don't know what you are talking about. I'm a man, the court DID award me full custody of two little girls under the age of ten and it was over 30 years ago, GA you really stirred the pot with this one. Me I thought she was really a very cruel person at heart and he was completely justified in what he did. Old Reg deserved some broken bones and crushed balls not fame and fortune. Signed: BTW

She rushes in expecting to see her dead husband, sees no body, and immediately has sex?

How the fuck does that cork?

While the original story begged for an ending, this wasn't anything even in keeping with the original story. It's like some retarded Cuck Rant.

She was expecting to find a body in the room or at least somewhere in another room near it and when she didn't, she didn't bother to look around, just got naked and had sex which is something she wasn't even considering to start with???

This "Ending" made no sense and I am glad I read it before bothering to read any of your other work. It saved me some time as I am sure the rest of your work is just as awful as this.

for both the wife and the seducer.

none.

otherwise, it was an average ending. i didn't hate it.

keep writing.

Better than the original, but still not very satisfying at all.

I favour a painful death and quicklime! This sad diatribe was a travesty of all things to do with relationships! Sadly, the court system in the USA is too corrupt and misguided for the custody arrangement you suggest and most MEN would have a much stronger reaction. Not a great ending to a pathetic story!

Actually worse than the original. Reg gets off unscathed, writes a book and the instructor helps destroy marriages. GA, wanna take your mouth off of that cock long enough to grow a spine?

GeorgeAnderson

edrider73's original tale was not worth wasting your considerable writing talents on. Dear old ed gets off on story plots that involve the abject humiliation of the major male (hubby) character. I acknowledge that your take is superior, but honestly, I prefer your original creations.

Why would they come in the room thinking he shot himself, and not see a body, but star having sex. Why would they not wonder where he was. No blood or anything.

It wasn't bad, and it was short - all good points. I liked the fake gunshot a lot, it was very very good.

But wasn't Reg married in the original - to Penny? This sequel seems to have forgotten that part - why did she stay at the restaurant while Vera and Reg headed home. And why didn't they call the cops and tell them that there was a gunshot at her home?

Oh well. I enjoyed reading it even thought my comments above may not sound like I did. I certainly voted full stars.

what a mess this sorry attempt of a sequel is. Enough plot holes to fly a 747 through and the rest of it was borderline ridiculous. A book dropped on the floor mimics a gunshot? she doesnt notice theres no dead husband when she gets home and decides to screw her co-conspirator? Her boss withholdsa promotion sxnd raise, actively connives in the destruction of a subordinates marriage in her official capacity and all that happens is hed gets a transfer? The drama professor was fired with extreme orejudice and blackballed for overseeing this ethical outrsge? The college wasnt out a mega million $ lawsuit? Oh please.

Read Mattblack's sequel instead. Much much better snd a worthy addition to edrider's excellent story.

Wife was a horrible person. Husband had no choice but to dump her skanky ass. She fucked over a good guy, threw away her marriage, and hurt her children for her teacher. What a silly woman.

Dreadful story, the original and the sequel, though GA has tried to retrieve something from the disaster. Not enough and certainly leaves one unsatisfied.

1) If Vera, asswipe Reg and his wife Penny were all sitting listening in at Denny's, how come only Vera and shitface Reg turned up in Gary's bedroom?

2) Vera by her, "Oh Reg what have I done? what have I done?" is convinced Gary has shot himself, obviously in the bedroom where the recording device was. When she entered she didn't wonder where the body had gone? Or did she think Gary's corpse just got up, cleaned up all the blood and walked off?

3) A stressed out sobbing woman, having just lost her husband, doesn't go from wracking sobs to sexually induced giggles, moans and a healthy enjoyment of the cheating she is suddenly indulging in.

So, inspite of her love for Gary, Vera was happy to be "consoled " by her lover and stayed to do the bastard's play. How come he - and the teacher - were not acted against for their subsequent actions, destroying marriages? A most improbable scenario and unlike a GA story. 2*s.

Good story

I wanted to like your story. And I do like your message/moral. But rushing home thinking her husband is dead, strangely not finding a body, then immediately jumping into bed with the guy who helped create the sudden unexpected destruction of her marriage??? Just silly.

Now that I've read all of your stories here, I can only come to one conclusion: All of your male protagonists are wimps and cuckolds! All your female protagonists are crazy sluts! None of your characters is made to be acceptable! The actions of your borrowed stories have been falsified by you to such an extent that they are only acceptable to a real submissive cuckold! But they say a lot about your inner attitude! Sometimes provisional help is helpful!

I'm glad your story showed Vera lost, but you completely forgot about Penny! Did she know or condone Reg's actions? If not, she should have taken him to the cleaners if not doing a Lorena Bobbit on him and cutting off his penis. Reg, the Drama Prof, and the University should have been sued for intentionally harming multiple marriages. Although you handled Gary OK, he could have found another love later. Vera's reward was to lose everything including any future with her children and grandchildren.

This was far better, a fair story, but Reg and that professor need a meeting with a baseball bat. There could be the basis for a law suit here with Reg writing/selling his seductions as well as the professor setting up the fall of five marriages to a predator. Was Penny part of Reg predatory life?

But as my comment to the original story - most all happened but the fall of his female boss in Gary's marriage demise. Vera shattered the TRUST. But how Gary got custody of his girls is remarkable in this day and age of the mother never does anything wrong court system (and the mother never pays child support too). 4*

He faked his suicide. A plausible, but unexpected result.

She arrived in a panic, looking for and expecting a body...

Sex with her co-conspiritor is NOT the next move.

Bad choice for a story line.

i stop reading anymore of your stories. You're either gay or a woman

Extremely poor sequel. I only finished it because I read the original and other sequels.

Guy 'shoots' himself and hides. Wife arrives and finds no body. No wondering what is going on. She goes from frantic to fucking in a flash. Guy leaves closet where he is hiding takes a few pictures and lets the guy leave.

Too many holes and implausible responses.

Scott Free

Once again, the predatory male gets off scott free. George Anderson will never let you down. For Christ's sake George, couldn't you at least have had Reg stub his toe running down the stairs, or maybe get a B instead of an A+?

Guys guys this is actually a breakthrough story for GA, this one ended in divorce, a highly unusual occurrence in GA’s universe.

Admittedly it’s not an original but merely a continuation piece but baby steps George baby steps.

There was no begging for forgiveness by the husband who had done nothing wrong, a common thread that runs throughout GA’s work.

But you may well notice that in his other stories the husband humiliates himself as he grovels for forgiveness in causing his wife’s transgressions and they live happily ever after.

Letting this hubby get his freedom results in him living a sad and lonely life pouring all his love into raising his children.

Clearly GA wants the male protagonists to take their rightful place kissing the feet of their mistress. Many commentators have suggested GA is a woman viewing the presented cannon of work I see no reason to dispute that conclusion.

Having said that, there is no doubt GA is an accomplished author, to illicit invective on such a mammoth scale, denotes clever and skilful writing.

There must be an awful lot of masochists here because we all know GA will continue producing stories of this ilk yet we still read them and rant afterwards.

Keep it up George I like a good rant.

She has sex with her 'lover' or lover over the presumed cooling corpse of her dead husband....that SHOT HIMSELF OVER THEIR 'it's just a prank, bro'.

Please tell me in what universe her vagina gets wet at that moment.

It was bad story telling. I understand that her excuse COULD work, had she been grieving for days and days over the death. But she was fucking the guy IN. THE. MOMENT. She didn't make a single selfish evil choice. She IS pure evil.

Most normal people don't see their spouse die and their IMMEDIATE reaction is, "I need some dick/pussy"

You made her character evil to the core. A sociopath liar. Emotions of shock, grief, anger, sadness....sure! But not lust. For fucks sake.

She should have been there for her daughters.

I agree with Wisquejac, how could she be taken seriously for hurting her husband then abandon her children. The teacher, school and Reg should have been sued for damages, especially once the pattern of damaging marriages emerged and the book written.

Sorry, her being frantic with worry about her husband killing himself, and then jumping straight into sex with another man in their bedroom was something out of the Twilight Zone. Good writing, but clumsy plotting.

This story is sub-par (to me, at least) for a person I consider to be one of the best writers on the Literotica site. For some reason this story just doesn’t reach me like GAs other stories have. Three stars ⭐️ for this one.

How did he get custody of the girls?.

Still don't like this sequel very much. I prefer the one where everyone gets busted.

I agree with many here, the plot was not up to par. The idea of jumping into bed wit Reg, immediately after rushing home to see what happened to Gary, was a 'wee bit' hard to contemplate, even for her. It would have been a 'wee bit' more believable for her to have been bawling and wondering aloud to Reg, "what had they done?", not to start the humpy rumpy thing and, where did the phrase " are you naked yet" come from? Can she not see? I remembered the other story as I started to read this and this one did fall very short of it. Better luck next sequel.

It does happen when the wife and the corpulent fucker (thanks Gordo) she's involved with are as repugnant as these two were. A 27 year old man can end up with custody of two daughters well under the age of 10, I still have the court papers to prove it 40 years later. Signed: BTW

Wouldn't they be expecting to find Gary's body in the bedroom before they fell on to the bed to fuck? After all they had to move the tablet from the bed that was playing the recording and they were listening to his response when they believed he committed suicide. That is one cold cunt and one son of a bitch to be turned on by everything they caused. That they were wrong and got caught should be the least of their worries. Signed: BTW

I agree with some of your other critics: Vera rushing into the house where she believes Gary is dead, then, within minutes is having sex with Reg is over the top and under the bottom...at the same time. And around the bend.

GeorgeAnderson, you may be the best writer on the Literotica site. You are one of the best short story writers I've read. You are a great writer.

But this one's a stinker.

I pretty much agree with "The Viking Sailor" below. However, in my opinion, this story didn't need another ending. I was quite happy with the original from EdRider73.

Your worst plot to date

One star

I agree with VikingSailor and others... to go from believing of a death and then into sex so quick is a unbelievable. Also, I am sure Gary would have sued Reg’s ass off so badly with his part in the destruction of his marriage. Even if he kept the heat (media heat) on his disruptable book... maybe Reg would suffer with lack of book sales. Maybe?!?! Thanks.

theVikingSailor, I agree with your thought on the over the top mourning sex. But I disagree on this author being the best on this site. His shit stories inspire more shitty authors. He is not great

Finally one of the few and I mean few GA stories where the male rises above himself and does the right thing.

It’s like you don’t know any real people, with real feelings or emotions. NOne of your characters have a ring of truth or believability to them. Great fiction but writing to enrage people is a poor substitute for talent and imagination.

While I don't usually agree with many of the characters actions, I enjoy his writing and like reading George's stories. As others have said, the sharp left turn from "Oh my God, I just heard my husband commit suicide" to "come here and fuck me" is so hard to reconcile with the character that it kind of ruins the whole story.

Stretches credibility beyond breaking point. Well written, as are all GA's stories, but fails to engage on any level.

LA