by 99donsnow
Then all the girls, including Lauren, told these guys bu-bye and left, never to come back again, because they didn't want to be used in the petty competitions between father and son. This totally sucked.
Really, just like in real life right! I guess you want us to also believe that this maybe a true story? What a load of bullshit.
I have never said it's real or you have to believe it's real.
Which direction do you want this story to proceed? Let me know in comments. Cheers!
Dude, you need an editor. Badly. Do you even read over your stories after you've finished writing them, or do you just hit publish without a second glance? So many obvious errors, including several times where suddenly Matt, not Don, was fucking Lauren. Have a little pride in your writing and respect for your readers.
I really enjoyed it! Not very realistic haha but who cares? I'm not always here for realism. I vote for it ending by they move in with the dad and the dad takes the son on as an apprentice to learn how to build his own harem in time, and they begin to share all three of the sluts.