All Comments on 'Summer at Home Ch. 01'

nice slow opening, very ertoic

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Could have been 5 stars, except for the terrible - TERRIBLE - dialogue. Nobody - NOBODY - talks the way these people are talking. It's as though you used one of those automated computer script-writing programs.

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Let's hope that Ch.2 features <i>"new & improved"</i> dialogue.

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teasing want cut it.get busy and fuck the women with 10ft.cock.

Hopefully,itwillbealonghotsummer,without10"cocks,40dddtits,etc(myspcerbarisonstrike)

Jack will be a mere shadow of his former self by the end of the summer.

But what a marvelous way to go.

I hope he has unending stamina.

The story is cute.

Love the story and the dialogue, PLEASE continue.

I like a nice, slow start. I agree that the dialogue is not realistic, but this writer has potential. The best way to write good dialogue is to write it, then read it out loud. If you sound stilted, your dialogue is stilted. The story is interesting, and the author is clearly writing from the heart, or maybe a little lower!

I really enjoyed it and am looking forward to the following chapters

The site is obviously NOT just for sex. The author knows better than to rely on spell check, and so far is telling a good story. I look forward to more.

Very nice, very cock-hardening - it's going to be a long, hot summer!

You can write! Good beginning to what I hope will be a good story.