All Comments on 'Surprise! (in 750 words)'

And so it goes!

5

Hard to follow.

Pretty good. I liked the dinner actually ended up being the scorned spouses. 4.5*

Good story but needs editing. Not well written. Hard to follow.

10 Big Blazing Stars for writer, pretty concise, fun read. Thanks, Buster2U

thanks

Clear, concise. Got it all done in 750. Thank you,

Not a fan of BTB stories, but this is better than average. At least there was no violence.

4.

Good one. D

That worked. Good solution to the question of "How did he know?"

Great idea, well written! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The drama was good.

But it's just a part of a story, isn't it?

3 out of 5 from me.

Nicely written. Just enough surprise and shock value. Great entry for 750 words.

Wife had one fiinal chance to cuckold him She immediately went to a attorney and went to court for illegally changing the locks and locking her out of their shared apartment Judge gave husband 1 hour to return original locks to apartment and because of his actions ordered him to give up the apartment to her until the divorce action was settled Husband destroyed wifes beloved painting in leaving apartment Judge ordered husband to jail for 4 weeks fro the destruiction and ordered him to stay 1000 feet from wife and apartment Also not to contact her but go thru lawyers Husband refused and called repeatedly cursing her Judge sent him back to

jail for 3 months and gave all money in account to wife while divorce is on hold Wifend finds hia $50,000 stash of stolen money She hides 25,000 then turn the money over to court Money was stolen from his job She gets reward and soon to be ex husband go to prison for 10 years Not 750 words but it good to cuckold losers

Yes, Wife cheats. That is the end!

A very well written short story.

Thanks @funperson969.

A short well thought out scenario.

5 * loved it.

Fun fact, by adding -- to your story some spell checkers may actually count it being 751 words.

Not worth commenting on, average to boring!

Good story, thanks for writing

Poor writing, as others have said, it is hard to follow.

Good enough.

But.

YOU CANNOT KICK A SPOUSE OUT WITHOUT A COURT ORDER!!!!

They could fuck 42 midgets, an entire pro football team and the entire cast of Addams Family and you still need to get a judge to set the court order.

I’ll never get it. Every single person reading this will forget it exists no more than ten minutes after they’ve finished. What’s the point?

I usually like your writing, however this one was brief and lacked any meat…..all salad…..sStill keep writing as you are one of my favorites with righteous endings.

Why do authors use lock them out of their home. It’s crazy as all courts do not allow this!

"Hard to follow?" Not for me.

I loved it! Puzzled by a couple of comments, though. Needs editing? Why? Not well written? Poppycock! There's nothing wrong with the writing. Most mystifying of all, though was not just one but two declared it hard to follow. Anyone who has difficulty following this has no business to be viewing an adult website.

JR

"Not a fan of BTB stories" - Lifestyle66

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Good to know, but completely irrelevant. You see, this was not a BTB. This was just a little DTB.

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For those, like Lifestyle66, who are apparently unaware, there are four sub categories of Loving Wives stories. While some believe that only RAAC and BTB exist, those are just the extreme ends. In between them we have True Reconciliation and Dump/Divorce The Bitch/Bastard.

A really good version of one of the most common tropes posted here.

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Brenda literally didn’t know how to play it when hubby showed up. That was fun to watch.

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4 ****

Lifestyle66 is confused again. This isn’t a BTB story. There’s no Burn here. Divorce isn’t a Burn. It’s just letting the government know that the contract has been broken.

To be a BTB story requires that the guilty parties are punished in some way beyond the natural consequences of their choices.

ZK

One of the better 750 word stories. FIVE stars for such an enjoyable and POINTED story Rick the Dick???

Too short but better than the long stupid stories.... *****

I’m in a contrary mood today. Three stars is all I could muster, nothing new to see here.

Fun read! I struggle to understand those who read the 750-word notice and then complain about it being too short. It's kind of like putting on a pair of shorts and complaining because they don't reach your shoes. - They are SHORTS!

Way to turn it around on the cheating cunt.

Short, sweet, complete. 5 stars.

I'm with others, not understanding earlier commenters finding it hard to follow. I didn't--maybe I'm closer to Einstein than I thought.

I liked the story--short, sweet and simple. An easy 5.

Good one. She is, without a doubt, busted, and her cheating lover lover goes down too.

While nice, the aftermath is way to abrupt and falls flat for me

5 stars. If there are no assets she doesn't win by getting her unfair share, and hopefuly in words 751-1000, he gets together with dick's ex wife and lives happily ever after, while the skank ends up alone and unhappy.

⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

More Plz.

Well done!

LOL

Really well done!

Another good laugh

Nicely done, thanks

Just desserts, great ending.

That covered all the bases in the 750 challenge but left tons unsaid lol. Good short story. BardnotBard

Unknown cuckold is not a cuckold by my definition just a poor guy who unknowingly gets shit on