All Comments on 'Surprise Love Pt. 01'

Good premise but in serious need of editing.

Nope, 1* apart from needing to be edited it went straight from her finding him in the snow to fucking, rushed, almost feels like you couldn't be bothered fleshing out your own story. as it stands this belongs in erotic couplings NOT romance.

I like your premis, and for a first post a reasonable effort..

I would like to see you draw out the story, develop it and the characters more. This first chapter seems very rushed, and watch your spelling.

I am sure you will improve as you move forward

Nice idea.....horribly executed. Not romantic.