All Comments on 'Surprise Pt. 01: Exploring'

Wonderful start, hope to see more chapters.

Great Story, you'll get ragged on about needing an editor.. I always get ragged on about that myself. But really an interesting read. Keep it up and I'm looking forward to the next one!

English is obviously not your first language. Good story, but you definitely need an editor, and a better translator.....

Strange but I loved the story

Lost it there and dumped. What CRAP! 1 star

Waiting to read more. I do wish that you turn "on" spell check. The story is good but I get a little distracted by the spelling and sentence structure, but continue on please.

Like the sense of nonjudgmental caring underlying the entire story!

cincy4fun6 is correct. Your story is screaming for an editor knowledgeable in grammar and punctuation. It will be a much easier read.

An unusual story with much love and some thought-provoking aspects.

But, regrettably, it was smeared by a lot too many typos, inconsistencies and errors. Be aware that when we complain about language and style errors it is because they disrupts the flow of the story. One has to stop and think what the author really means. It may also give the impression of a lazy author who hasn't bothered to take the time to let the story lay to rest for a couple of days after writing it and then reading it slowly out loud to catch any errors - which I'm sure you would do if you had done it - before submitting the story.

So, yes, as cincy4fun6 predicts, I suggest you ally yourself with an editor if you cannot find somebody else around you that could read the story with fresh eyes.

#sequelwhen?

Not bad, really could use an editor the gammar is a bit clunky and doesn't flow as smoothly as it could.