All Comments on 'Surviving Ch. 01'

Great start we need a second chapter

A 20 inch dick?

Playing tennis with a bat?

Only two passengers on a plane commanded by sex freaks who didn’t realize they weren’t at 30k feet but right above the ocean?

A teen who had never masturbated before?

Two characters who dislike each other but then she randomly turns into a slut?

He handcuffs himself to someone in the middle of the ocean, as if that wouldn’t ensure his drowning?

You have talent (the only reason I wrote this was because you asked for critical feedback). The premise is actually intriguing, though. A bit of restraint from the more ridiculous elements (which you may be doing for satire) and you could have something.

Chapter two please!

Enjoyed the story goof start looking forward to the next chapter.

If someone I was on a deserted island with pissed in the fresh water, there wouldn't be a second time they did it. Nor would I give them a chance to use any makeshift cookware as a chamberpot.

Dysentery is nasty, and if you end up sick with it on a deserted island, you're dead.

Next chapter pleasee

Next chapter. Next chapter. NEXT CHAPTER

Thanks so much for all the support and the comments. AND I've ALREADY FINISHED CHAPTER 2 BUT literotica takes forever to approve! So as soon as they approve it, it should be available. HOWEVER, if you want to read the entire story (already finished more than 5 chapters), without having to wait - dm me and I'll give it for a price.

As another don't piss in where drinking etc

Jesus Christ... How much effort did you put in to actually making your characters UNLIKABLE? You know, that's the exact OPPOSITE of what a writers supposed to do, yes?

Do you have any idea about the Mediterranean sea, size, islands and climate? Sounds more like the Indian Ocean.

Sorry, the whole story is just too wrong in so many ways.