by PurpleDeer
I couldnt get through the story, as somehow you'd managed to make it neither sexy, sensual or erotic.
Also I'm presuming that English is a second language for you as your use of language/phrasing in parts if the story seemed clumsy and off to me.
Just stop putting your vomit on the website. It clutters up the place and wastes the website's resources.
There was nothing about this that made it worth reading.