by maxdname
this little gem. You have a great writing style and manage to add humor in with some pretty hot sex. Very impressive short story. I wonder what you could do with a longer piece giving more character build up and plot line.
I just LOVED this. Was sorry to see it end. You wrote well and added humor, making me want to follow this relationship thru for awhile. Write more, and soon, please!
What a wonderful start, you can paint a picture of what is happening and make it real. Can't wait for the next installment, keep going and let your imagination loose...