All Comments on 'SX69 - Ultimate Love Potion Ch. 22'

I love the foot kissing aspect, and his internal monologue about inadequacy. Fun seeing how power hungry the former nerd is getting. Great job!

You seem to have done your research on Islamic culture. Slightly disappointed you called the abaya a dress, when it's supposed to be a robe, but I'll give you props.

I have read all 23 chapters of your story and thought it was pretty good. It is great that you have someone to edit it for you but you also need a proof reader to take care of the typo's.

Keep up the good work because I believe you have a future there.