by glynndah
You got me!
The setup was great...you lined your pins in a row and knocked the all down with the last paragraph.
Kudos!
You got me with that twist. =) You chose the perfect words to go with the scenes.
Wow...
Bard.
The build up and anticipation did not disappoint. The dialogue added the perfect pinch to the delicious twist at the end. :)
~Luna
PS: Let's hope this comment does not disappear, as the last one did.
Love the way you turned it around in the end, the wording was perfect to transition what you expect into what is.
from a witch butI didn't. good story very well written. You deserve to do real well in the contest.
What can I say... excellent writing... and I do so like the twist.
This little witch turned out to not be quite as good as expected in the end. Still a nice job with the story and a great twist at the end. Good luck in the contest.
Nice switch in the surprise ending.
Good job.
Good luck in the contest.
Sexy and fun! Outstanding, good little witch! A sisterly :kiss: on the cheek from L8.
it amused me greatly, I really liked the way it ended.
a :kiss: from a half-civilized barbarian.
I am already afire with this,what bliss to sink my fangs into her alabaster breast as we mate for eternity,her lythe legs wrapped around me in the lambada as I seek her real soul.
A well-written story with a wonderful ending. For everyone but Connor. Good luck in the contest, good witch!
Really well done. It really got me. Good luck in the contest.
at the end. But, don't say it was non-erotic. Vampire stories seem to always have a certain built in eroticism, unless the vampire is just a brute.
I really enjoyed the ending, very clever. Caught me by surprise. If you can't do the bite, stay out of the night.
Good luck in the contest.
You had me at the finale - excellent surprise ending! Good luck in the contest.
I was grinning so much when I got the last paragraph!
Good luck in the contest, from the naughtly fairy to the good witch.
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A delightful little tale with a great ending. Congratulations to the good little witch for a delightful read!
Very good, Glynndah. You captured the darkness of Halloween and twisted the ending just right. Bravo!
I also loved this great little tale,it should do well best of luck.Jimbo