All Comments on 'Team Building'

Skip it.

You'll thank me

Pretty bad.

And interesting premice, but the execution was just awful.

Please stop.

They seemed to comply too easily. No longer a marriage but a business arrangement. Not for me

Yeah right picture perfect marriage ……. Not ! If you wanted a whore , you didn’t have to marry one .

Interesting logic. Makes a lot of sense

Now I see why the low ratings. Both the husband and wife are whores and morally broke scum. He happily went along with Eileen's seduction. He blamed a 'possible' drugging. He let all the rest of the people fuck his wife and then let her whore herself out for a commission. And she is obviously going to continue. he doesn't even are if the kid is his. 1 star.

This sucks, please, get a category for cuckoldry, or put it in a different slot. The BEAR does not approve.

The BEAR

That was terrible. Didn't like it one bit. He'll divorce her for being a slut but encourages her to be a whore. How about suing the company for rape. Not a fan of this story.

Drugs and forced prostitution. BS. That company should have belonged to him and Eileen should have become the whore.

Read like a shopping list in the cucko-la la-land for retardeds, posted in the local latrine.

Captcha

Of course this would happen like this! Of course he didn't go for a DNA test! Of course Eileen was ready to risk her business by doing what she did! This was late for the stupid story contest launched yesterday!

A waste of time

I'm sorry, but I found it to be silly, and not in the least bit believable.

Not worth the read..........

"Eileen of course won't admit it." - If you go to the hospital right away, they can test for drugs. I don't think there are any drugs that are undetectable after a weekend.

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"I should be at the most fertile time of the month." -Didn't Eileen say that it WASN'T her most fertile time?

2 wrongs (4 wrongs if you count the cuckolding and the drugged rape of bothe husband and wife) dont make a right.

what was this about, really? didn't even read as a fantasy.

At least she's honest about being nothing more than a whore instead of pretending to be a Loving Wife.

Idiot sissy wimp husband and cheating skank slut wife. Two awful people. Who lets his wife become a slut without kicking her skank ass to the curb? What complete moron allows his wife to become a paid whore? What wife wants to betray her man, vows and marriage for more money? A woman who should never be in a marriage to begin with. This is just a completely terrible story.

Yay. Another cuck story. I wish morons would quit posting these under Loving Wives.

You start this story with 'My wife...' then proceed to tell us nothing but reasons that opening is a total lie. She's a cum dumpster and you are a fucking idiot.

Some people can separate sex from love so it's an interesting story concept. But it was rushed. There also could have been sexual benefits for the husband as part of the deal moving forward. I encourage you to get better, take your time and build a better story every time.

Horrible story.

If you're going to write something like this, DON'T write it in 1st person!.

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First person requires that the readers know the character's thought and feelings. You wrote that his only reaction to Eileen told him was "I joined them and it was an interesting and exciting weekend." Really? He had the same emotional reaction to being told Susan want out for a hamburger. For 1st person, you need to have written SOME reaction, some moment when he was at least pondering the ramification. You made him as -- maybe more -- detached than an impersonal 3rd person narrator.

"LT56linebacker: this sucks, please, get a category for cuckoldry, or put it in a different slot"

Agree, I propose a new category parallel to the "Loving Wifes": the "Hating Wifes".

Stupid premise for a story, had you set out at the start that they were swingers perhaps but even then it would be a leap. These stories are best if there is at least some element of believability

The critics are taking this far too seriously.

The couple aren't being coerced, they see the end game.

I normally don't like LW stories, but thought it was great!

Promising story line. Need to fill in more detail.

5 stars for another heart wrenching story. Can you imagine, going to a company retreat to have your wife fucked continuously for 24 hrs by 6 different guys? I'd have to put a bullet in the brain box of each one of those assholes, then her boss eilene for setting it all up behind my back. Some folks don't value 'fidelity' some do. No one makes a slut of my women, only I am going to do that, at my discretion. Great writing, Great story, Great Idea. Great Drama. Thanks Buster2U

Again more complainers that seem to think that the "Loving Wives" section is supposed to actually be about a true blue loving wife. LOL LOL LOL LOL NO NO NO The Loving Wife section is about how your loving wife disrespects her husband in almost every conceivable manner. The Loving Wife is really "Whore Wife" if you want a real sweet true blue wife, go the the Library, NOT literotica, then just to complain over and over because you don't have a clue and you don't the stories. LOL ha ha ha ha Morons

Well, already seen these extreme cheating-cuck tales and, not surprisingly, the inevitable really low negative feedback by the thousands readers of the LW category.

This is an author who needs a punch in the face

PURE HORSESHIT!

This might be called team building, but, on truth, it's more like marriage destroying. A smelly pile of dogshit.

Although preposterous, it is just a story. Too many people look for strict reality.

Had couple thousand more words to it and make it a BTB or burn the company down maybe might get a 4.

Why would Eileen invite the obvious potential fallout from the kidnapping and rape of an employee and her husband?

As far fetched as the premise is, the matter of fact acceptance by the husband is off-putting.

Company whore!

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LOL so many people reacting like this story is real. That the Couple are real people and just despicable folks. LOL There is a big difference between reality and a story. Most folks reacting think the Folks portrayed in the story are real. LOL I did as well. However, the more that the story affects you the higher should be your star ranking of it. Not if you don't like the results or the story line. The effect of the author's story on the reader, is the true validation of a great writer! Good Writing, good Story, good effort! Thanks, Buster2U

@sbrooks103x,

"Eileen of course won't admit it." - If you go to the hospital right away, they can test for drugs. I don't think there are any drugs that are undetectable after a weekend. -

If it wasn't a controlled substance, it wouldn't matter anyway.

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"I should be at the most fertile time of the month." -Didn't Eileen say that it WASN'T her most fertile time? -

Eileen wouldn't lie to him or would she?

What a company will do for sales and what they will have their employees do is mind blowing. Who said that a woman wouldn't be a whore if the money wasn't right?

I’m surprised Busted2U is so passionate about this horseshit. Guess it was the mention of the big black clowns the author threw in to make sure we knew she was an extra common whore.

Odd, it’s a bit bull it point writing, like the premise but not sure if you’re going to get it right

Bullsh1t story last load of crap I will read by this author

Gave it a 1 as there was no 0