All Comments on 'Tell It to the Judge'

Fucking around on a cop partner is not a good idea, not a happy story but well written, actually like a real husband would react, Thanks.

she was about to tell him what.

The story was okay but the mistakes were too many. "My sister's wife"(?) is one example. Proofread and be less concerned about the volume of stuff you post. Quality over quantity.

could of been a good one. But whats the excuse? He drugged me?

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Ok it seems the gangster/criminal was using drugs on SOME of the women. MAYBE the cop's wife. MAYBE.

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so she was drugged the 1st time a few weeks ago. She didnt stop. She didnt confess.

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Think about it. A cop's wife says "a gansgter drugged me and rappd me." Of course the cop in this story would LIKELY believe her NO questions asked!

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Instead she seems to have-- of course the story and background is kind of short-- gone out of her way to fuck the gangster REGARDLESS of the tough position her husband a COP was put in.

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The wife's sister reaction was also telling. She didnt plead with brother in law for help. She spat at him!. This implies the wife's sister hated the husband for a number of deeply disturbed twisted reasons and that the wife had emotionally left the husband and sided with the sister.

SHAME TO LEAVE OFF AND FINISH THERE. A LITTLE BACKGOUND ETC WOULD HAVE FLESHED IT OUT. LIKED THE POLICE TWIST. SENTENCING AND BAIL... COURT ROOM ACTION AND OR CONFRONTATION AFTERWARDS WOULD HAVE BEEN GOOD.

But a whore is a whore even if she is married to someone even a cop. They need to be arrested, jailed, and on the watch list. He needs to divorce the slag asap, because when she gets out she will clean him out. Knowing you are married to a whore should make your skin crawl knowing the diseases and related issues you have been exposed to unknowingly. Some people think being married to sex worker would be exciting. I guess it would be for pimps, cucks, and people with no self esteem or sense of self worth. Can you hear it, hey the gal you paid to fuck last night is my wife, laffs. Trash is trash, she and the sister are trash. Throw them both away.

Matt Mareau curse. It is very dangerous than swine flu & bird flu. Get well soon.

Given the warning that the lack of set-up and final resolution was present at the beginning, I'd have to say that the story is nicely packaged. (There could have been an entire, much longer story, covering all of those details, but this is the essential element concisely presented.) -- KK in Texas

Very well done, even though the story was short, there was nothing left out, the story told everything that it needed.Thanks for the story........Rich

I think Britease wrote this story solely to get some positive comments (which his standard wimp husband stories never get). Unfortunately, there was absolute zero character development and the ubiquitous bar fight and of course the husband had to be a COP....... I have also read a story very close to this one here or on storiesonline. So maybe we also have some bad plagiarism or plot theft.

Had to laugh at the gangster's surname name, Bray. You could have even moved closer to the originals if you had named them Reggie and Ronny...

Good luck

Sounds like it might have been interesting. But zero description of character, setting, almost everything that should have been developed in the plot. Sure you wanted the "surprise" at the end, but to get that you sacrificed the whole story line. 25 for what might have been.

Your story has a style not unlike some of the modern noir stories I've read. Good work.

I see a part two to this. Perhaps it really was the drugs and there's hope after all.

It is good to encounter something to enjoy. They are few and far between of late! There could be all sorts of explications of why the cops were there, and the girls. The future será que será.

By the way, that small error that one of the commentators jumped on suggest to me that you subconsciously applied the Latin word order... Been speaking too much French, of late?

Thanks!

Guys why so down on Britease? This is a perfect little vignette. So some stuff is left to our imagination. So what? Is it really that difficult to use your imagination? What we have here is what you would see as a bystander. Getting a story down to its essentials can be difficult, and is a good exercise for a writer. Brit, as ever, a story that portrays a real possibility.

I try not to get more out of a story than the author put in. Sometimes it is difficult to do so, but I am getting better at it. Thanks for writing

The writing was fine but the plot was depressing. The only question is why he waited so long to break up the orgy.

60 year old George

<p>I found it humorous.</p>

<p>I equally find it funny that the author says:</p>

<p><i>No real sex --- <b>no background</b> --- no happy ending. It's not that sort of story</i></p>

<p>Yet I still read a comment here about the lack of "background" for the characters. Well there was a tiny bit, right when he says:</p>

<p><i>I'd always thought myself so lucky to have married a girl as beautiful as Lindsey, with her striking long blonde hair, shapely body and large firm breasts.</p>

<p>I'd fell head over heels in love with her within a week of first meeting her, and we'd been married within six months.</i></p>

<p>So it was there, just a more "limited" background, but the Author said not to expect it.</p>

<p>But 60 year old George really got me with the: "Why did he wait so long to break up the orgy" comment. Personally I thought it was because of these comments:</p>

<p><i>I started to make a move on them, but Mike held me back, warning me that I might wish to think twice about it, and indeed the <b>seven big thugs</b> who were sat at their table.</p>

He was right of course, the seven men in question being the Bray twins and their gang, <b>the most feared and ruthless bunch of criminals in South London</b>. Not the sort of guys that anyone with any sense would want to mess with.</i></p>

<p>Not to mention he was there to bust them for "Drugs" and you know he would actually have to see them doing drugs before he could arrest them. If his wife wasn't where she was supposed to be, doing what she wasn't supposed to, with men who weren't her husband, you know I can't fault him for letting her be rounded up with the other drug pushing trash.</p>

<p>So I think the answers to both of those statements were contained in the story that "I" read. I have to wonder what the others were reading. (^_^)

he has plenty of ammunition for the divorce....and what will she get after a cpl days in jail and having her family have to see not only her but her sister also booked for prostitution....maybe she will give it to hubby free afterwards trying to get back in his good graces..hope she gets what she deserves

Liked the story, but the ending sort of left me hanging.

A little more to the ending would have made it a great story.

It just gets you a whole lot of trouble.<P>

Thanks for sharing.

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</span><o:p>My only real criticism of the story is that the author segued into the narrator’s status as a cop leading a raid with no warning or back story – a sort of <I>deus ex machina</I> if you will. </o:p>

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</span><o:p>So long as the story was one of a police raid – starting with that – and it scoops up the narrator’s wife “by mistake” it would work better</o:p>

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<p class=MsoNormal><i> "I warned you prick face," the guy in front of me screamed at me as he made his lunge, his huge fist flying through the air towards me.

It never got there.

It never arrived.

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</span><o:p><I> It never got there.</I> and <I> It never arrived</I> are redundant

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I really liked this one. Now you need a follow up on the divorce and her going to prison where you get everything.

Britease, this story's fine to this point. I mean to say that beyond this we don't know what brought about the action at the club you describe. What led up to this story ---- and, additionally, what is to happen now. You stories are generally quite good reads! RAG

It was a very good flash story. From a selfish point of view, would like you to take it and expand it into a full fleged story.

For me, the story is finished.

Boyd

The story is unique in that it violates the basic rules of story development. Still, it does convey a fucked up wife getting her just desserts. But it does stand to be improved through expansion and follow-up. There is a lot by way of character development and explanation, historical framework regarding the plot, and treatment of "what happens next?" that can be written.<p>

But I fear the author won't, because the abbreviated nature of the story seems to suggest that the author believes he has found a new or different story approach. C'est fini!

I'm sure that all husbands would like to arrest their cheating wife

We actually liked this one because it was short, to the point and the consequences matched the situation. For once, we did not have some miserable male idiot suffer months of humiliation & other such bull shit [which is typical of this author's usual fare]. Of course, this particular story is only a glimpse of this sad tale but hopefully this seemly non-wimp husband will dump out the slut wife along with the rest of the trash and not recycle this obvious whore.

if you're married and your wife is that much of a whore, and you don't know... you're an asshole and you deserve everything!

Response so far is more or less as I expected!

Some good --- some not so good!. fair enough!

Sorry about the sister's wife bit, but as some one has pointed out (thank you) in French that would be how you might say it --- Sorry!

I write for my fun and for the reation! I admit it, and obviously I get it, being yet again top of the comments portal. Sorry, but that's what turns me on, and keeps me going.

Thanks everyone

Britease

Satisfaction doesn't always end with an orgasm. You could take it further but having said what was necessary you ended ...... I was satisfied.

Well written, and an original twist. I look forward to more! Sean

Please follow up with this one. I know it is against your usual policy, but I would love to see her explain this one....

Thanks!

... either that or you spent some time on a dude ranch recently.Harry is able to come up with enough complaints and what ifs to critique a novel, and it's only a "flash" story as another pointed out.You must be on to something!Pistolpackinpete

... kind of hanging like this, but I think this one is just "too unfinished." Too many loose ends and the overall feeling I get is that the husband wants more of an explanation. I have no doubt he'll go through with letting them throw the book at his soon-to-be-ex-wife, but I feel he wants to hear more of the story.

Hey Britease, make a sequel!!!

Something like "Tell It to the Judge- The Trial". I´m curious to know what the stupid wife will say...

"I know you like to leave some of your stories...". Although I understand the point of these very short stories, I feel there is another story here - the wife's. Plus all the little side stories like having his wife as part of the arrest, associating with a criminal. The impact of that on the case and him. anyway - thanks for the stories and good luck with you writing.

It was a short to the point story. Well written. Not every story has to be spelled out in great detail, to be psychoanalyzed to death. Read it for what it is and let it go at that. Well done author, always enjoy reading your stories, good or bad you keep us entertained.

Loved the twist at the end ! Needs a 2nd chapter to smooth out the rough ends though. Good story, when you are left wanting more !

Enjoyable. Didn't mind that it was short or didn't met Harry's definition of a story...Thank you.

Did I just read a real story of some sort.!

Could have been a little longer and you know of course that you really should write a follow on story where the wife tries to explain what's going on. Of course I can not imagine any way that she could but then it's your story.

To use a pun, if you had fleshed out the characters and the story this could have been good. As it was I didn't care for him or her or anyone in the story. Maybe the judge would, but I doubt it.

The problem many authors have is that they drag out a story needlessly. This works the way it is. Perfect.

No waste of words, to the point and concise. Very well done!

He treated her like the whore she was. I thought it was a really great story.

I fucking loved it!!!!!!! LOL

Totally rock with those stories about men with their junk still intact

Well the cheating whore got what she wanted, FREEDOM. Nice read Thanks

BH

in such a setting, there must be some background. Why did she do it? What let to the weird situation?

Why do you never tell the wifes POV (not to the judge, but to your readers)?

Totally undeveloped.

It's a very good story but it practically begs for a sequel... perhaps from the wife's point of view explaining how she became entangled in the mess? As it is now, it ends abit unfulfilling. But it's a great start for more though!

Oh, well, welcome to the wide world of prostitution!

could have been better with more details and a bit longer. all things concerned, it was great!

How does that expression go? mmm... I know... BURN THE BITCH.

Ha

...and ever so sweet.

I think I would like to hear her explanation.

OH YEAH

HA

Britain women complete utter moron sluts? I'm just wondering

story. Sad but good.

It's called the 'spread of American culture.' Neat story - but not one of your best.

Tough luck, Sweetie!

I think they will have a tough job keeping Sweetie in jail (gaol?) very long, unless there is evidence not included in this account! No money was paid to the females (and likely never was!) No drugs were sold by them, and Sweetie was not reported as having even taking any drugs, whether voluntarily or slipped to her. Maybe lewd public behavior and nudity! (Assume cops were either videoing or photoing the 'party!).

The evidence for divorce should be easy. Hope England has less-stupid divorce laws than most US states!

Nice Flasher! 5* (don't usually do that for quickies)

'As my sister's wife passed me.' You mean, As my wife's sister passed me.'

Thanks for the offering.

A very good story as almost always...thank you...

then to the judge in the divorce court.

see ya! ta ta

This was such a cool story. GOOD FOR THE BITCH YAY!!!

How come all the cheating cunts want to explain. "I'll explain it to you later."

Fuck you whore. Stupid cont.

Go To Jail

Go Directly To Jail

Do Not Pass Go

Here I digress

Stay in jail

Fucking worthless cunt

she explained she was with her sister. I think I would have preferred a quiet partner in this escapade, and taken them all out. a gun, or drugs in their drinks, or something, that would not involve the police. try to make sure the wife is the last one to go. maybe a river trip with cement shoes.

That's what she deserved...And the only regrets he had were to have meet her some day in his life...What a stupid bitch...Married to a Detective Inspector and behave like she did and with mobsters...Pleaseeeeeeeee...

Too short!!!!!

yet harms every-one. TK U MLJ LV NV

Nice short with a twist!

the brevity makes it better

dirty work: somebody's got to do it.

One cop I know had to write speeding tickets for both his wife and his mother-in-law. Another cop went on a domestic dispute and had the privilege of putting handcuffs on his wife and her boyfriend. Another policeman was first on the scene where a drug dealer shot and killed a customer, the policeman's wife. Yet another policeman responded to a traffic accident that resulted in the nonfatal injury of his wife. She had been giving her boyfriend oral sex and he veered into the lane of oncoming traffic. The boyfriend was killed and the policeman's wife had a list of serious, but nonfatal injuries. It happens more often than one may expect.

Some fucking detective the sad-assed husband turned out to be. Couldn't even detect that his wife had been fucking around on him for a year!

5*

Hope you get around to finishing it.

You lose a point for not finishing. It did show promise though but finishing it up with a two paragraph epilogue would have a 5.

Mr. Ease You Sounded Resigned At The End Of The Story. .Like Here It Is?.... Whatever!

Smile And The World Will Smile With You? "That's What My Preacher Man Said"

Thanks Brit For This Great Story★ ★ ★ ★ ★ WOOF!

Finish The Damn Story!

Obviously she gets charged for prostitution and jailed. Who pays bail? Surely not hubby. And she gets kicked to the curb. He's more than angry - he's embarrassed.

I mean this is the nature of "Flash" stories. Most leave a lot hanging. But the best, like this one, point to the finish line. It's the ones that truly leave things in the air, with multiple possible directions that leave me unsatisfied.

5-stars

...and very dark. Good that he let her experience the fruits of her labors.

You arena master of the short flash story. Enjoyed it.

A detective and didn't know what his wife was doing

3 stars

Twist got me first time

Knew what was coming and still enjoyed

Wish there could have been a follow-up. When she's in her jailhouse orange, him explaining the upcoming divorce. He can ask, did you buy any Tupperware?

I thought you said there WASN'T a happy ending! Lol cheers *****

That was a wicked twist and another dumb broad.

good story 4* cant be a 5 when you dont finish it or follow it up

Tsk, tsk! You want to play you got to PAY. Good story. Keep writing. Thank you.

I wanted to hear her story

A disgusting display of betrayal. But redeemed in the immediate dispassionate comeuppance required.

Would have preferred if you would have finished the story completely (losing her job etc. for the bitch). But still solid story. The aftermath would have been hillarious to read.

You primed the pump. I was ready for the end. With the speed with which you got from start to end (much appreciated) a proper finish would have been welcomed.

At first, it wasn't what I imagined... For me, the betrayed husband would come up with some hard and cruel way to resolve the differences with the traitorous bitch, her whore sister-in-law and the "bad" boys.

And I imagined husband, rotting behind bars by the possible "carnage".

So the husband was a man of the Law... how ironic, for bitches and all.

And the whole thing worked out, the bad guys got arrested and the bitches too.

Okay... there could be an epilogue about the guys being abused in jail and being the wives of "Bubbas", the sister-in-law getting some beatings, sporadic, as well as his ex-wife's main bitch.

Of course she should suffer some emotional injuries, such as the exposure of her prostitution activities to relatives, friends and co-workers and the glimpse of everything she threw away on account of becoming a slut.

I had given 3 stars, as I always do, when the author deserves to have his writing effort rewarded. But after the second reading, I went up to 4 stars.

The author completely deceived me and ended with a happy ending... at least I am very happy with the result of the police investigation.

But that's just my opinion.

A simple short story with a nice little sting in the tail, even if that does require a little "suspended-disbelief" Could perhaps work well in the "Humour" category?

Should this {As my sister's wife passed me she spat} be replaced with:- "as my wife's sister passed....."?

Dick.

Another great build up of a story that had so much potential, but the supposed writer doesn’t believe in or doesn’t know how to write a complete story with an actual full on ending that makes it complete!!!

So damn sad and such a waste…………