All Comments on 'Tennis Camp Ch. 01'

poor guy!

VERY hot story! Can't wait for Chapter 2!

Gross! What a teaser! You had plenty of time to fuck and ejaculate. What you wrote was pure teasing.

A great start. I like how the action is drawn out, there's a bit of suspense to it. The writing is also fantastic, except for its a little to medical. The way she describes her orgasm sounds like a doctor diagnoising a disease. But that is a small quibble.

This guy is obviously going to cum any moment, and he's got the woman he's already fucking and two 18-year-old girls in front of him. Wow, what a cum-bath we're in for...

Hot. Could have used more dialog. You also have a tendency to cut sentences in half with unnecessary commas. But I hope to see more.

OK, I couldn't help it and I voted for myself.

Knocking on Heaven's door, slow and gentle is good but.... A great start to what promises to be a great story. Good build up and characters. I applaud and appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.