All Comments on 'Terran's Awakening'

A cheating wife and a guy with a big cock. Wow! How original.

"staunch looking" - Staunch isn't usually used in this context. You might have a staunch wall, or say, "He was a staunch liberal," or "a staunch Trump supporter." Maybe say, "powerful or strong looking."

Why do you need to follow the porn addiction of the woman giving a BJ. Few if any decent woman give BJ's.

Sooo much unfinished. Loose ends aplenty! Sarah leads the guy on...and on...and on...then says 'I'm done with you now, bye!' For such a county king pin, Brody disappeared way too easy. Where were his lawyers? He would never have darkened a jail cell much less spent time in one! And the MC doesn't return to the ex-wife for some paybacks? Maybe send her photos to her new boyfriend? Now he knows about her and Brody, he should have rubbed it in a bit. MEH 1☆

Not a very satisfying ending.....he didn't get the girl

Terren pr Terran. 11 of one and 115 of the other.

one of the r\tree roots across the path of comfortable reading.

"Just call him Terry."

My first tentative steps into writing erotica, hope you enjoy.

Odds are it isn't. While not complete shit it wasnt worth 4 pages.

Oddly uninteresting, at least at the beginning. And I didn't get any farther. Better luck with future work. And thanks for the effort.

Women don't "shutter" when they orgasm. They "shudder". Major turnoff. Stopped reading what was turning out to be an almost decent story.

You could have stopped after page one.

Sorry couldn't get past page one! and most of that I didn't read....Awful!

*1* or less?

Nasty cheating whore and an asshole.

Round up all the cheaters and drop them on an uncharted Island with seeds to plant and provisions to state their own cheating colony and fend for themselves! 1 teeny tiny star.

nice arc to story that found its way to tidy up all stray bits